关于英语改错,Health authorities have make much of the benefits of oil derived from fish.People with diets rich in fish oil have the greatly reduced chance of heart disease.It has been found that the Eskimo population of Greenland,with a traditi

关于英语改错,Health authorities have make much of the benefits of oil derived from fish.People with diets rich in fish oil have the greatly reduced chance of heart disease.It has been found that the Eskimo population of Greenland,with a traditi
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Health authorities have make much of the benefits of oil derived from fish.People with diets rich in fish oil have the greatly reduced chance of heart disease.It has been found that the Eskimo population of Greenland,with a traditional diet of Arctic fish seal,and whale meat,a diet very high in fat,suffer practically no heart disease and almost no diabetes.Similar findings come from Japanese.A comparison of the diets of farmers and fishermen,with an examine of health records and death rates of the two groups,has shown a link between the health of the human heart and fish oil.Whereas the average Japanese farmer has 90 grams for fish a day,the average fisherman has 250 grand.In all other respects,their diet are similar.Correspondingly,fishermen has lower blood pressure and lower rates of heart disease and arthritis.This compares with the 20 grams eating daily by the average person in the US.There,rates of heart disease are five to seven times higher as in Japan.
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关于英语改错,Health authorities have make much of the benefits of oil derived from fish.People with diets rich in fish oil have the greatly reduced chance of heart disease.It has been found that the Eskimo population of Greenland,with a traditi
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Health authorities have make much of the benefits of oil derived from fish.People with diets rich in fish oil have (the 删除)greatly reduced chance of heart disease.It has been found that the Eskimo population in(of) Greenland,with a traditional diet of Arctic fish seal,and whale meat,a diet very high in fat,suffers(suffer) practically no heart disease and almost no diabetes.Similar findings come from Japan(Japanese).A comparison of the diets of farmers and fishermen,with an examination(examine) of health records and death rates of the two groups,has shown a link between the health of the human heart and fish oil.While(Whereas) the average Japanese farmer has 90 grams of(for) fish a day,the average fisherman has 250 grand.In all other respects,their diets(diet) are similar.Correspondingly,fishermen have(has) lower blood pressure and lower rates of heart disease and arthritis.This compares with the 20 grams eating daily by the average person in the US.There,rates of heart disease are five to seven times higher than(as) in Japan.