Since we came to the world,the importance of family had appeared.With our parents' help,we gradually grow up.In the family,we can get a lot of suggestions from our parents.They tell us not to play on the streets,or how to get along with others well.S

Since we came to the world,the importance of family had appeared.With our parents' help,we gradually grow up.In the family,we can get a lot of suggestions from our parents.They tell us not to play on the streets,or how to get along with others well.S
Since we came to the world,the importance of family had appeared.With our parents' help,we gradually grow up.In the family,we can get a lot of suggestions from our parents.They tell us not to play on the streets,or how to get along with others well.Sometimes their advice is great,but there're some times they give us bad advice.However,whatever they say,we can feel their love from their action and behavior.We always feel happy because parents are around us all the time.
Family is the place where we get care from.Family is really important to us all.
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Since we came to the world,the importance of family had appeared.With our parents' help,we gradually grow up.In the family,we can get a lot of suggestions from our parents.They tell us not to play on the streets,or how to get along with others well.S

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Since we came to the world,the importance of family had appeared.

Since we came to the world, the importance of a family have been there.

Since we came to the world, the importance of a family have come with us.

With our parents' help, we gradually grow up.

no problem!

In the family, we can get a lot of suggestions from our parents.

no problem!

They tell us not to play on the streets,or how to get along with others well.

They tell us not to play in the streets, or how to get along well with others .

Sometimes their advice is great,but there're some times they give us bad advice.

Sometimes their advice is great, but occationally they give us some advice that don't work.

However,whatever they say,we can feel their love from their action and behavior.

However,from whatever they say to us we can definetly feel their love.

We always feel happy because parents are around us all the time.

We always feel happy because parents are around us all the time, especially when we need help.

Family is the place where we get care from.

A family is the place where we get care from.

Family is really important to us all.

A family is really important to all of us.

Since we came to the world,the importance of the family had appeared.With our parents' help,we gradually grow up.In the family,we can get a lot of suggestions from our parents.They tell us not to play...

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Since we came to the world,the importance of the family had appeared.With our parents' help,we gradually grow up.In the family,we can get a lot of suggestions from our parents.They tell us not to play on the streets,or how to get well along with others.Sometimes their advice is great,but there're some times they give us a bad advice.However,whatever they say,we can feel their love from their actions and behaviors.We always feel happy because parents are around us all the time.
Family is a place where we get care.Family is really important to us all.

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