My favorite sport star My favorite sport star is a professional tennis player and a Russian young woman.She is pretty with beautiful smile and big,brown eyes.She is very tall and thin.She is perfect in many ways.Many people called her “Renaissance

My favorite sport star My favorite sport star is a professional tennis player and a Russian young woman.She is pretty with beautiful smile and big,brown eyes.She is very tall and thin.She is perfect in many ways.Many people called her “Renaissance
My favorite sport star
My favorite sport star is a professional tennis player and a Russian young woman.She is pretty with beautiful smile and big,brown eyes.She is very tall and thin.She is perfect in many ways.Many people called her “Renaissance Woman”.Now,can you guess who is she?Yes,she is Maria • Sharapova.Today,I will introduce something with her.
Her childhood
Maria Sharapova was born on 19 April 1987 in a small Black Searsport town of Sochi.When she was 4 years old,she met with a very famous tennis coach,Form that moment,Maria started hitting tennis balls.Two years later,a tennis champion saw the Sharapova.She takes sharapova to the world—famous tennis academy in Florida,America.her tennis career is so successfully
Her accomplishment
In 2004,Sharapova stunned Wimbledon audiences when she beat champion player Serena Williams.She beamed the first Russian to win a Wimbledon women’s single title.And in 2005,she is World No.1.At the end of 2006,she was the world's highest-paid female athlete.But in 2007,she was puzzled by illness,is very terrible to her.However,she never discourages ,she always be by virtue of their strong will and optimistic attitude ,her charming smile always on her face.In 2008,she won Australian Open.Sharapova has won three Grand Slam singles titles and 21 WTA singles title .
After work
After work,Sharapova has many interests.Example:reading,visiting museums,painting,and learning new languages.Sharapova is a fashion woman.She joins lots of fashion show.She is also a good model.Many activities has not disturbed her own job,because tennis is her favorite job,the World No.1 is important to her.
This is Maria • Sharapova.Despite many difficulties.But she is always positive and optimistic.In any case,she always smiles to other people.
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My favorite sport star My favorite sport star is a professional tennis player and a Russian young woman.She is pretty with beautiful smile and big,brown eyes.She is very tall and thin.She is perfect in many ways.Many people called her “Renaissance
第一行的第二个"a"去掉,表一身兼二职的第二个不用冠词.
第二行"ways"改成"fields"表示领域.
第三行"called"改成"call"表示一般情况,不用过去时.
第三行"who is she"改成"who she is"
第四行"with"改成"about"
第七行"Form"改成"From"
第八行"hitting"改成"playing" "takes"-----"took"
下一行"her"---"Her" 下一行"successfully"---"successful"
下3行"+the world no.1"
下一行"puzzled by"---"diagonse with" "to"---"for"
下2行"+the austrialian open"
下一行"singles"---"single" 下一行"title"---"titles"
下3行"show"---"shows"
下2行"to"---"for"
简单改了一下,仅供参考,加油~

建议还是请教你的英语老是吧

1called-call
2I will introduce something with her." with"-about
3hitting tennis balls "hitting"-playing
4the Sharapova去掉the
5She takes sharapova to the world "the"-a
6her tennis...

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1called-call
2I will introduce something with her." with"-about
3hitting tennis balls "hitting"-playing
4the Sharapova去掉the
5She takes sharapova to the world "the"-a
6her tennis career is so successfully "successfully"-"successful"
7She beamed the first Russian to win a Wimbledon women’s single title "beamed"-became
8she is World No. 1.-she was the World No.1.
9is very terrible to her-which was very terrible to her
10she always be by virtue of their strong will and optimistic attitude ,her charming smile always on her face
"always be "was always "their "-"her" "always on her face "
-is always on her face
11 21 WTA singles title . title-titles
12Example-For example
13She joins lots of fashion show"show"-shows
14Despite many difficulties. BUT she is always positive and optimistic 去掉BUT
我水平不高，可能有所差错，希望可以帮到你。另外，请注意每一句完整的句子都应该用点号。每句句子第一个字母都应大写。

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1.My favorite sport star is a professional tennis player and a Russian young woman.
and后面的a应该去掉。因为是指同一个人。例如：
In came a reporter and teacher.进来的人是一位老师兼记者。
In came a reporter and a teacher.进...

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1.My favorite sport star is a professional tennis player and a Russian young woman.
and后面的a应该去掉。因为是指同一个人。例如：
In came a reporter and teacher.进来的人是一位老师兼记者。
In came a reporter and a teacher.进来一位记者和一位老师。
2.can you guess who is she?
改成：can you guess who she is?
变一般疑问句，只把主句的助动词提前，从句语序不变。
3.I will introduce something with her.
with改成about
介绍某人的某些事，介词用about。
4.her tennis career is so successfully
successfully改成successful
形容词作表语修饰名词career
5.She beamed the first Russian to win a Wimbledon women’s single title.
看了半天，没想通beam的意思。是不是笔误，应为becamed？
6.And in 2005,she is World No. 1
is改成过去式was比较合适
7.she was puzzled by illness，is very terrible to her
主句puzzle的用法不太合适，另外从句没有先行词
建议改成：she suffered from illness，which is very terrible to her
8.However, she never discourages , she always be by virtue of their strong will and optimistic attitude ,her charming smile always on her face.
你可能想用独立主格结构，但中间的she always be by virtue of their strong will and optimistic attitude似乎欠妥当，建议改成：However, she never discourages, her charming smile always on her face， that is by virtue of their strong will and optimistic attitude.
9.Despite many difficulties. But she is always positive and optimistic.
改成：Despite of many difficulties, she is always positive and optimistic.
Despite后面一般跟从句。另外，一个独立的句子加个BUT不太好，建议这样该一下。

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