帮我看看有没有语法错误,或者有那些句子可以改进.Dear Ms.Chen:\x05Very honored to be your .You teach business documents let me benefited a lot,I like your relaxed teaching style.If I met a very old-fashioned professor I guess I wil

帮我看看有没有语法错误,或者有那些句子可以改进.Dear Ms.Chen:\x05Very honored to be your .You teach business documents let me benefited a lot,I like your relaxed teaching style.If I met a very old-fashioned professor I guess I wil
帮我看看有没有语法错误,或者有那些句子可以改进.
Dear Ms.Chen:
\x05Very honored to be your .You teach business documents let me benefited a lot,I like your relaxed teaching style.If I met a very old-fashioned professor I guess I will hang this course,so I was lucky.
\x05Looking back this semester,this is the most miserable a term since I entered university,from the computer professional turned to the industry and commerce management major.I really don't like the industry and commerce management,I think I was tired of learning that this is not seen before.Heavy course,the new face,suffering from the ills of the education system.I don't know how long I can go.Many people said the young suffer some setbacks later would be beneficial.I think I just in growth.
\x05The university may not is that you learn much knowledge,but a growing environment impact on you.With some peers in together,sharing some idea,this is the key.When we graduate,some people in his own cause,some people find satisfying work,and some people are unemployed,this depends not only on knowledge,but also depends on your overall quality.
\x05I can write this mail to you,looks like a coincidence,but I never believe what coincidence,I believe that since I took to the road,I will finally here.
Please forgive me I did not use handwriting; because my calligraphy is really bad,considering you reading convenience,I think print out better.
\x05 New Year is coming; I hope everyone had a happy New Year,especially you.
Your student:Ming yang Li
第一句应该是Very honored to be your students,我漏了个students，这是我要交的作业，必须用英语写的嘛，俺英语不太好的嘛!
大概表达这么一个意思
非常荣幸成为你的学生，您教授的商务英语让我受益匪浅，我喜欢你宽松的授课作风。如果我碰到一个非常古板的老教授，我估计我这门课就挂了，所以我是幸运的。
回想这半年，这真是上大学以来最悲惨的一个学期，从计算机专业转到工商管理专业。我非常不喜欢工商管理，我想我厌学了，这是以前没有过的。繁重的课程，新的面孔，饱受弊病的教育制度。我不知道我还能走多久。有些人说年轻人遭受一些坎坷以后会有好处，我想我正在成长。
大学也许不在于你可以学到多少知识,而是一种生长环境对你的影响。一些同龄人在一起,分享一些想法,这是关键。当我们毕业时,有些人自己创业,有些人找到满意的工作,一些人失业,这不仅仅取决于知识，还在于综合素质。
我能写这封邮件给你，看起来像一场巧合，然而我从来不相信什么巧合，我认为既然我走上这条路，就终于就这样。请原谅我没有用手写，因为我的书法真的很烂，考虑到您阅读的方便，我认为打印出来比较好。
新年将至，希望新年的喜悦能洋溢在每一个人的脸上，新年快乐

帮我看看有没有语法错误,或者有那些句子可以改进.Dear Ms.Chen:\x05Very honored to be your .You teach business documents let me benefited a lot,I like your relaxed teaching style.If I met a very old-fashioned professor I guess I wil
You teach business documents let me benefited a lot这句可改成：The business English that you teach always makes me benefit.其中that引导定语从句
I guess I will hang this course这句改成：I guess I would not pass the course.
from the computer professional turned to the industry and commerce management major. I really don't like the industry and commerce management,改：for I have changed my major from the computer professional to the industry and commerce management and I really don't like the industry and commerce management.
I think I was tired of learning that this is not seen before. 改：I think I am tired of learning that , which didn't happen before.

It really needs some serious work, man!
To name a few: Your first sentence "Very honored to be your." is not a sentence, it lacks both subject and verb. The next one is also confusing. "You teach ...

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It really needs some serious work, man!
To name a few: Your first sentence "Very honored to be your." is not a sentence, it lacks both subject and verb. The next one is also confusing. "You teach business documents let me benefited a lot, I like your relaxed teaching style. " I'm guessing Ms. Chen taught a course namely "business documents"? You "fail" a course rather than "hang" it.
The list goes on and on...
Ms. Chen sounds like a Chinese name, you might consider writing your letter in Chinese instead.
Good Luck!

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