请帮忙修改这段话!Now,he takes Computer Science as a more challenging field and desires to pursue studies and devotes to new intellectual adventure in it.I respect his decision and support his choice of your M.A.program.In a field other than h

请帮忙修改这段话!Now,he takes Computer Science as a more challenging field and desires to pursue studies and devotes to new intellectual adventure in it.I respect his decision and support his choice of your M.A.program.In a field other than h
请帮忙修改这段话!
Now,he takes Computer Science as a more challenging field and desires to pursue studies and devotes to new intellectual adventure in it.I respect his decision and support his choice of your M.A.program.In a field other than his undergraduate major I still believe he will make an excellent student and I would appreciate your favorable considerarions to her application.

请帮忙修改这段话!Now,he takes Computer Science as a more challenging field and desires to pursue studies and devotes to new intellectual adventure in it.I respect his decision and support his choice of your M.A.program.In a field other than h
studies-> the studies
devotes->devotion
new intellectual adventure -> a new intellectual adventure
make->become
her－》his

写得还不错的，应该没有太大问题，只是最后的her application是否应该改成his application?