My name is Lihua.Recently I’ve learned that a summer camp is going to be held in Singapore by a national middle school organization.On hearing the news,I feel excited and am eager to have a try.As for myself,I am an outgoing person who loves to tak

My name is Lihua.Recently I’ve learned that a summer camp is going to be held in Singapore by a national middle school organization.On hearing the news,I feel excited and am eager to have a try.As for myself,I am an outgoing person who loves to tak
My name is Lihua.Recently I’ve learned that a summer camp is going to be held in Singapore by a national middle school organization.On hearing the news,I feel excited and am eager to have a try.
As for myself,I am an outgoing person who loves to take part in lots of activities.Constantly,I hang out with my friends to enjoy ourselves.At school,I am active in every class.As a result,I always get good grades in exams.When it comes to my English,I am good at oral English,but still have a lot of work to do.In my opinion,students should seize every chance to grow experience.So,I would like to take part in the summer camp to introduce our country and also learn from other activities.
I hope that you can approve that plan so I could gain more experience.Hoping to get your reply!
书面表达
假定你是李华，从互联网上得知一个国际中学生组织将在新加坡((Singapore)举办夏
令营，欢迎各国学生参加。请写一封电子邮件申请参加。
内容主要包括:
I.自我介绍(包括英语能力);
2.参加意图(介绍中国、了解其他国家);
3.希望获准.
注意:
1.词数100左右:
2.可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯;
3.邮件开头和结尾已为你写好。
___________________________________________________________________________

My name is Lihua.Recently I’ve learned that a summer camp is going to be held in Singapore by a national middle school organization.On hearing the news,I feel excited and am eager to have a try.As for myself,I am an outgoing person who loves to tak
高三生,以做一篇短文改错的方式来看你的作文的……几个建议
⒈【On hearing the news】,I feel excited…
如果要用非谓语的话,On要去掉,hear与I构成主动关系用ing可以,feel应该用过去式felt
⒉【As a result】,I always get good grades in exams.
As a result（有一种不好的事情造成不好的结果的感觉）如果可以换成别的词语吧,如Therefore
⒊I would like to take part in the summer camp to 【introduce our country】 and also learn from other activities.
把our改成my更合理些
learn from…表示“从活动中获得学习”可以,如果只表达知道其他活动,from需去掉
⒋I hope that you can 【approve that plan】 so I could…
that改this或者my会好些
so后面加个that构成目的状语从句好些,
你的文章亮点不少,不过还是要注意时态语态等细节错误的,因为高考错误的太多也得不了高分,总之一句话“少失分 多争分”.个人见解啦,仅供参考.