请英语高手帮我修改下这篇作文,四级水平During recent year,The topic of where economic development or environmental protection which has aroused public attention become more and more popular.As for such a question,different people hold

请英语高手帮我修改下这篇作文,四级水平During recent year,The topic of where economic development or environmental protection which has aroused public attention become more and more popular.As for such a question,different people hold
请英语高手帮我修改下这篇作文,四级水平
During recent year,The topic of where economic development or environmental protection which has aroused public attention become more and more popular.
As for such a question,different people hold different opinions,Some people believe that we should develop economic rather than protect eviroment,To begin with,the better econmy will benifit our contry,In addition,our coutry will become wealthy,Last but not least,The economic development important than enviroment protection.
As we all konw,every coin has two sides,The other people believe that the enviromental protection important than economic development,The reasons for this are as follows:one the one hand,From the protection eviroment,we can enjoy the fresh air,That is,we can improve our life quality,On the other hand,if our enviroment rule break,how can we live?
In my opinion,I am so absolutely in favor of protecting enviroment,the reason why protecting enviroment is they can let our people enjoy the truth life,only in this way,can we get satisficatory result.

请英语高手帮我修改下这篇作文,四级水平During recent year,The topic of where economic development or environmental protection which has aroused public attention become more and more popular.As for such a question,different people hold
先把错字改了
四级作文怎么说呢,你这些表达很多都是从范文中选的,其中不乏中式表达,比如different people hold different opinions,every coin has two sides.但对于四级水平来说就这样了……
last but not least前面最好用first and foremost对应
你第一主体段逻辑混乱了,第一个和第二个理由完全说得都是一个,而且没有细节
第三个原因你这么表达就是错误的,而且也没说为什么,我觉得你想用的是thus或threfore.
不应该是from the protection environment,而应是by protecting environment.
that is应该替换成therefore.第二个主体段最后没看懂
最后一段太冗余,都改成简单句吧.
反正总体你英语水平很poor,模板和你自己写的一下就看出来了,建议好好复习高中语法课本
有时间学学新概念二册
没时间就背范文,四级作文的范围以及用词每一个几乎都会在范文中出现
如果你时间比较多的话,可以买托福进阶-初级写作,里面有很多地道的表达

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16级高手已经提了很多，就给你点几个文字小误吧，拼写错误，仔细点就可避免，如benifit our contry这里2字有误，单复数，recent year最好复数，还应注意正确词性搭配，develop economic 该用名词develop economy，另外，英语句子需要有谓语动词，你若干句子没有，如The economic development important ，important 形容词不能单独做谓语，前面要加动词is。看来你真该学习点英语语法

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During recent years,The topic of economic development or environmental protection has become more and more popular.
As for such a question, different people hold different opinions,Some people be...

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During recent years,The topic of economic development or environmental protection has become more and more popular.
As for such a question, different people hold different opinions,Some people believe that we should develop economic rather than protecting eviroment,To begin with,the better econmy situation will benifit our contry,In addition,our coutry will become stronger,Last but not least,The economic development is more important than enviroment protection.
As we all konw,every coin has two sides,The other people believe that the enviromental protection is more important than economic development,The reasons for this are as follows: At first,by protecting eviroment,we can enjoy the fresh air,That is to say ,we can improve our life quality.
In my opinion,I am so absolutely in favor of protecting enviroment,the reason why protecting enviroment is they can let our people enjoy the truth life,only in this way,can we get satisficatory result.

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