麻烦大家帮我改下文章（英语）My best friend is Liu Yang.His birthday is the fifteenth of March.He is fourteen years old.His height is 155cm.He lives in Jiang Yin.He only have one cousin.His father is a doctor.His favourite subject is Chi

麻烦大家帮我改下文章（英语）My best friend is Liu Yang.His birthday is the fifteenth of March.He is fourteen years old.His height is 155cm.He lives in Jiang Yin.He only have one cousin.His father is a doctor.His favourite subject is Chi
麻烦大家帮我改下文章（英语）
My best friend is Liu Yang.His birthday is the fifteenth of March.He is fourteen years old.His height is 155cm.He lives in Jiang Yin.He only have one cousin.His father is a doctor.His favourite subject is Chinese .He likes playing computer games.He often does his homework after school.He usually plays computer games at the weekend.His favourite sport is basketball.His favorite day of the week is Sunday.He likes Spring Festival best.His favourite season is summer.He likes eating hamburgers best,and he does not like rice.
要初一水平差不多,语法错误也帮我改下

麻烦大家帮我改下文章（英语）My best friend is Liu Yang.His birthday is the fifteenth of March.He is fourteen years old.His height is 155cm.He lives in Jiang Yin.He only have one cousin.His father is a doctor.His favourite subject is Chi
Liu Yang is my best friend.His birthday is the fifteenth of March.He is now 14 years old.He is 155cm tall.He lives in Jiangyin.He has only one cousin.His father is a doctor.Chinese is his favorite subject.He likes playing computer games,so he does his homework after school and usually plays computer games at the weekends.He likes sports too.He likes basketball.Sunday is the best day he thinks and summer is the best season.He likes Spring Festival the most.His favorite food is hamburgers,oh,he hates rice.

语法本身错误不多，可是你的简单句太多了。总是 he is开头。 这样的文章很不好看的。 你可以试着用点从句，比方第一句，可以写成My best friend is Liu Yang who is a fourteen-year-old boy, borned on 15th March... 试着这样再写一遍吧

My best friend is Liu Yang.His birthday is on the fifteenth of March(on March 15th).He is fourteen years old.His height is 155cm.He lives in Jiangyin.He has only one cousin.His father is a doctor.

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My best friend is Liu Yang.His birthday is on the fifteenth of March(on March 15th).He is fourteen years old.His height is 155cm.He lives in Jiangyin.He has only one cousin.His father is a doctor.
He likes Chinese best and often does his homework after school .He likes playing computer games and usually plays them at the weekend.His favourite sport is basketball.His favorite day of the week is Sunday.He likes Spring Festival best.His favourite season is summer.He likes eating hamburgers best,but he does not like rice.
注意：1.写文章时，不要面面俱到，应尽量写清楚一二个主题就行了。
2.同一个单词或短语不能用的太多，最好用相应的同义词代替。

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语法错误：the fifteenth of March->Mar.15th
那样写有点流水帐的感觉，建议不要用那么多的he, his,应多用连词。介绍时要注意逻辑（出生背景，家庭情况，个人特征），还有要注意详略结合。以下为更改版本：(按初一的水平，只能改成这样啦）
My best friend is Liu Yang.He was born in Mar.15th and he...

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语法错误：the fifteenth of March->Mar.15th
那样写有点流水帐的感觉，建议不要用那么多的he, his,应多用连词。介绍时要注意逻辑（出生背景，家庭情况，个人特征），还有要注意详略结合。以下为更改版本：(按初一的水平，只能改成这样啦）
My best friend is Liu Yang.He was born in Mar.15th and he's 14 years old now. He lives in Jiang Yin.His father is a doctor and his mother is....His favourite subject is Chinese. He often does his homework after school. He is 155cm high and likes playing basketball and computer games. His favorite day of the week is Sunday, because he can play basketball and computer games on Sunday.His favourite season is summer. He likes Spring Festival very much. He likes eating hamburgers best, but he does not like rice.
补充：
初中语法：
连词是一种在句子与句子之间,短语之间以及名词等其他词语之间起连接作用的虚词,它不能单独作句子的成份.按其意义可分为并列连词和从属连词两大类.?并列连词连接的双方是对等的.常有的并列连词有and, both…and, either…or, neither…nor, not only…but also, as well as等.但如果连接的两部分意义不趋向一致,意义有转折的并列连词有:but, however, while (而),only (只不过).还有表示选择关系的并列连词,如:or, or else, otherwise… 再有的是连接双方,互为因果,或表示前因后果的连词有:for, so, therefore (因此),then等.?从属连词在初中范围内常常用来连接名词性从句,如:that, if, whether, 其次用来连接状语从句.其中有原因状语从句,常用的连接词有:when while, as, since, before, after, once, as soon as, until, till 连接条件状语的连词有:if, unless, as long as 等,而原因状语的连接词有because, since, as, now that (既然).目的,结果,方式,比较,地点等状语从句的连接词有:so that, so…that, such…that, as…as, than, where… 它们在句子与文章中几乎无处不见.?具体用法见下表.?
连词用法一览表
种类 功用 例句
并列连词 连接具有并列关系的 词 He knows neither English nor French.
短语 Are you going by bus or on foot
分句 Mary was a good girl, but she had one shortcoming.
从属连词 引导: 状语从句 I'll do it as you told me.
You will be late unless you hurry.
连接代词和连接副词 主语从句 What he said proved true.
When we'll start has not been decided yet.
表语从句 This is why he didn't come yesterday.
That is where he lives.
宾语从句 The man asked me which I liked best.?
I can't understand why she is so late.
关系代词和关系副词 定语从句 Nicotine is a drug that gets one into the habit of smoking.?
He came last night when I was out.

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