Topic:I love shopping.Spporting:I go to shopping in the mall,everyweek,Such as I like buy some shirt and trousers,Because peoples love a lot of beautiful things.And so I like it,too.Concluding:Shopping is everybody's their needs.主题是我爱购物

Topic:I love shopping.Spporting:I go to shopping in the mall,everyweek,Such as I like buy some shirt and trousers,Because peoples love a lot of beautiful things.And so I like it,too.Concluding:Shopping is everybody's their needs.主题是我爱购物
Topic:I love shopping.
Spporting:I go to shopping in the mall,everyweek,Such as
I like buy some shirt and trousers,Because peoples love a lot of beautiful
things.And so I like it,too.
Concluding:Shopping is everybody's their
needs.主题是我爱购物,文章要写得漂亮点.

Topic:I love shopping.Spporting:I go to shopping in the mall,everyweek,Such as I like buy some shirt and trousers,Because peoples love a lot of beautiful things.And so I like it,too.Concluding:Shopping is everybody's their needs.主题是我爱购物
spporting?没这个词啊
I went shopping every week in the mall.The products that I especially loved to buy are shirts and trousers,and all the beautiful things that I found with a regular price,just like everyone does.Buying is an activity in which people procure their needs and develop new products of all kind.In brief,I really like shoping!
不知道你需要多少字,总之全部改过了,还加了些字.不知道行不行?

Topic: I love shopping.
Spporting: I GO SHOPPINGg in the mall,everyweek,Such as
I like TO buy some SHIRTS and trousers, AS PEOPLE love a lot of beautiful
things, I LIKE THEM TOO.
Concluding: Shopping is everybody's LOVE.

Topic: I love shopping.
Spporting: I go shopping in the mall,everyweek,Such as I like to buy some shirts and trousers,
Because people love a lot of beautiful things. I like them,too.
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Topic: I love shopping.
Spporting: I go shopping in the mall,everyweek,Such as I like to buy some shirts and trousers,
Because people love a lot of beautiful things. I like them,too.
Concluding: Shopping is everybody's favorite.
1.词组go shopping
2.some后接可数名词复数
3.前一句用的是some shirts and trousers 所以第二句要用them
4.最后一句应这样该Shopping is everybody‘s needs但因为主题是我爱购物所以我把它改成favourite（最爱的）

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