·麻烦帮我改一下这篇雅思A类大作文An American film actor once said,“Tomorrow is important and precious.”Some people think individuals and society should pay more attention to the future than to the present.Do you agree or disagree?W

·麻烦帮我改一下这篇雅思A类大作文An American film actor once said,“Tomorrow is important and precious.”Some people think individuals and society should pay more attention to the future than to the present.Do you agree or disagree?W
·麻烦帮我改一下这篇雅思A类大作文
An American film actor once said,“Tomorrow is important and precious.”Some people think individuals and society should pay more attention to the future than to the present.Do you agree or disagree?
While the rhythm of people’s living is speeding up,there’re rapid changes in all aspects of our everyday lives.However,whether tomorrow is more important and precious than today has become a complex and sensitive topic issue .Personally ,I adhere to the opinion that the two consideration are intrinsically interdependent and indispensable.
On the one hand ,the present play a vital role in the future .I nitially ,it is generally accepted that today is the foundation of tomorrow .Given the significance of the present,at that moment we should try our best to lay a solid foundation for the way we live ,learn ,work and play .Additionally ,if we just focus on what we will have ,and ignore what we should do now ,we will surely receive a heavy blow and fatally fail to reach our goal in the future.Moreover,what ground is to building is what today is to tomorrow.The fact ,that scientists will invent more advanced technologies in the basis of modern technologies,serve as a good example.
On the other hand,the future exerts a profound influence on the society.To begin with,with the advent of new era,people are soon to find themselves living in an altered world which calls for new judgements,new ideas,a new habits of thoughts and a new order of values.Therefore ,the future is the guidance of our living standards and social development.Secondly,paying more attention to the future can provide more energy for people to solve current problems and avoid abandoning themselves on the failure happened at the present and the past.Last but not least,with right attitude of the future,people will not go astray,which is favorable to family and society.
In conclusion,the future and the present play an equally important role in our lives.Not only should we do our best now,but actively have a long sight of the future.
请主要从论点、结论、语法方面进行修改,因为那几方面是我比较薄弱的地方!改得最详细的,

·麻烦帮我改一下这篇雅思A类大作文An American film actor once said,“Tomorrow is important and precious.”Some people think individuals and society should pay more attention to the future than to the present.Do you agree or disagree?W
mary***_**@163.COM 这是一个环球的雅思老师的邮箱
当时我在环球买了一张120块的作文批改卡,可以批6篇,我只批了3篇就去考试了,作文从5提到6,觉得很有用
你把你的作文发她邮箱里,她会批得很细心的,还能批3篇呢
你发我个百度消息,我把我的邮箱留给你,这样你就可以用我的作文批改卡了

修改作文要靠自己，你考试怎么办呢？