英语改错!达人快来!Recently we have hold a discussion over whether the young couples should stay with their parents and live on the income of their parents.They called “kenlaozu ” in Chinese.Each student express his opinion.As far as I am

英语改错!达人快来!Recently we have hold a discussion over whether the young couples should stay with their parents and live on the income of their parents.They called “kenlaozu ” in Chinese.Each student express his opinion.As far as I am
英语改错!达人快来!
Recently we have hold a discussion over whether the young couples should stay with their parents and live on the income of their parents.They called “kenlaozu ” in Chinese.Each student express his opinion.As far as I am concern,it is wrong for the youngsters to live in this way.They should go out to work and try their best to make a living ourselves.Although they have fewer opportunity to find jobs and get high salaries,but they should at least find a proper job and try to support themselves instead staying at home.As matter of fact,their parents are becoming old and they should live happily and peaceful.It used to be very difficult to have brought their children up and they needn’t have responsibility to continue to support the youngsters

英语改错!达人快来!Recently we have hold a discussion over whether the young couples should stay with their parents and live on the income of their parents.They called “kenlaozu ” in Chinese.Each student express his opinion.As far as I am
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