逐句分析的追加5-10分,求帮修改作文,写错语法错误需要改正的地方,15分满分能打几分?麻烦.考四级the popularity of blogin recent years, blog becoming more and more popular in people’s life.many people use their to exp

逐句分析的追加5-10分,求帮修改作文,写错语法错误需要改正的地方,15分满分能打几分?麻烦.考四级the popularity of blogin recent years, blog becoming more and more popular in people’s life.many people use their to exp
逐句分析的追加5-10分,求帮修改作文,写错语法错误需要改正的地方,15分满分能打几分?麻烦.考四级
the popularity of blog
in recent years, blog becoming more and more popular in people’s life.many people use their to express their ideas and exchange their minds with others.
why does blog becoming popular recently?in my eyes, i think the main reason is that more and more people have their own computers now .so people can access to their blog whenever and wherever they want to.what is more, many people ,especially the younger,alway like to follow the fashion.when the people around them have their own blogs and playing popular,they will follow them as soon as they can,or they may feel they have been out of fashion.finally,some people may be shy to talk with others face to face,so they prefer to blog,they can say whatever want to.
with the popularity of blog, some problem that causes by the blog have been brought into public focus. for one thing, some students lose themselves in playing blog,result in that they can't concentrate on studying.it isn't benefit to their future life.for another, all kinds of things we can search out from the blog,no matter beneficial or harmful. youngers may read something that isn't suitable to them without the adults' guidance.

逐句分析的追加5-10分,求帮修改作文,写错语法错误需要改正的地方,15分满分能打几分?麻烦.考四级the popularity of blogin recent years, blog becoming more and more popular in people’s life.many people use their to exp

THE POPULARITY OF BLOG (The Popularity of Blog)

标题,全部大写字母或者实词首字母大写

In recent years, blog becoming more and more popular in people’s life. Many 

             改为has become,否则无谓语

people use their to express their ideas and exchange their minds with others.

   改为them,这里用作宾语应用人称代词的宾格形式

如果想简洁些就直接express and exchange their ideas with others

Why does blog becoming popular recently?In my eyes, I think the main 

           改become    In my view,且后面不用“I think”或直接Personally

reason is that more and more people have their own computers now. So 

people can access to their blog whenever and wherever they want to. What is 

      加get                                                删

more, many people ,especially the younger, alway like to follow the fashion. 

                                       always,或usually

When the people around them have their own blogs and playing popular, they 

                                                   这里没有懂

will follow them as soon as they can, or they may feel they have been out of 

fashion. Finally, some people may be shy to talk with others face to face, so 

                            可以加too

they prefer to blog, they can say whatever want to.

               加by which,否则不能用“,“并列

With the popularity of blog, some problem that causes by the blog have been 

                             problems    are caused,用被动

brought into public focus. For one thing, some students lose themselves in 

playing blog, result in that they can't concentrate on studying. It isn't benefit to 

            resulting,用非谓                           doesn’t

their future life. For another, all kinds of things we can search out from the 

                                        can be searched

blog, no matter beneficial or harmful. Youngers may read something that isn't 

  no matter不能单用,可以 no matter how beneficial or harmful they are 

    The young,如果后文用adult这里可以用adolescents

suitable to them without the adults' guidance.

Why does blog become popular recently？ In my opinion, 去掉they want to the young 跟随潮流 follow the trend 后面一句啥意思啊 反之 otherwise, they may feel be out of fashion. what they want to say. some problems caused by the blog have been raised concern among the public. for instance

the popularity of blog
in recent years, blog （+is）becoming more and more popular in people’s life.many people use their（改成theirs或者them） to express their ideas and exchange their minds with others....

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the popularity of blog
in recent years, blog （+is）becoming more and more popular in people’s life.many people use their（改成theirs或者them） to express their ideas and exchange their minds with others.
why does（改为is） blog becoming popular recently？in my eyes, i think the main reason is that more and more people have their own computers now .so people can access to their blog（改为blogs） whenever and wherever they want to（to去掉）.what is more, many people ,especially the younger（不用比较级改为young）,always like to follow the fashion.when the people around them have their own blogs and playing popular（这个表达不正确吧，play +个形容词是什么意思？而且前面是have后面是playing建议改为 try to be cool）,they will follow them as soon as they can,or they may feel they have been out of fashion.finally,some people may be shy to talk with others face to face,so they prefer to(to去掉) blog,they can say whatever want to.
with the popularity of blog, some problem that causes by the blog have been brought into public focus. for one thing, some students lose themselves in playing blog,result in that they can't concentrate on studying.it isn't benefit to(to改为for) their future life.for another, all kinds of things we can search out from the blog（blogs）,no matter beneficial or harmful. youngers may read something that isn't suitable to them without the adults' guidance.

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The popularity of blog(s)
In recent years, blog(s) (are) becoming more and more popular in people's (lives). Many poeple use (them) to express their ideas and exchange their minds with others.

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The popularity of blog(s)
In recent years, blog(s) (are) becoming more and more popular in people's (lives). Many poeple use (them) to express their ideas and exchange their minds with others.
Why (are) blog(s) becoming popular recently? In my eyes, I think the main reason is that more and more people have their own computers now(,) so people can access to their blog(s) whenever whenever and wherever they want to. What is more (is that) many people, especially the younger (ones),alway like to follow the fashion. When the people around them have their own blogs and (are) playing popular,they will follow them as soon as they can,or they may feel they have been out of fashion. Finally, some people may be shy to talk with others face to face, so they prefer (using) blog(s), they can say whatever want to. With the popularity of blog(s), some problem(s) (may)cause by the blog(s) been brought into public focus. For one thing, some students lose themselves in playing blog(s),(in result), they can't concentrate on studying. It isn't benefit to their future life. For another, all kinds of things we can search out from the blog(s), no matter beneficial or harmful. (Youngersters) may read something that isn't suitable (for) them without the adults' guidance.

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第一句话the popularity of blog in recent years删除，因为后面已经有这个意思了，而且翻译起来很别扭，翻译起来就是：“最近几年网络日志的流行，网路日志在人们的生活中越来越流行了”第一句话后应加动词，即最近几年网络日志的流行导致了什么什么，或引起了什么什么。blog becoming more and more popular in people’s life中bl...

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第一句话the popularity of blog in recent years删除，因为后面已经有这个意思了，而且翻译起来很别扭，翻译起来就是：“最近几年网络日志的流行，网路日志在人们的生活中越来越流行了”第一句话后应加动词，即最近几年网络日志的流行导致了什么什么，或引起了什么什么。blog becoming more and more popular in people’s life中blog后缺少is，而且blog应加s，因为后面说，“很多人们用他们来表达自己的想法”，既然是用“它们”就必须加s，many people use their to express their ideas and exchange their minds with others.中应把第一个their 该成them，why does blog becoming popular recently？中应把does改成is，in my eyes,应改成in my ideas，因为在外国人的表达中，in my eyes 意思是“在我的眼睛里”，而不是“在我眼里”，so people can access to their blog whenever and wherever they want to中access 后面的to应去掉，我也学过access to 的用法，但access在这里是及物动词，而且为此我也查了好多字典和例句。especially the younger，younger后应加s，so they prefer to blog中的blog一般都是名词，很少有用作动词的，这个句子应改成so they refer for blogs，with the popularity of blog, some problem that causes by the blog have been brought into public focus中应把with改成due to，problem后加s，causes应改成caused,some students lose themselves in playing blog中应把lose该成have lost，result in that they can't concentrate on studying中result加ed，for another后最好加个thing。如果打分的话估计打7、8分的样子。

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