请求帮忙批改一篇小作文,英语,急用! 谢谢Dear Jenny ,I am writing this letter to express my sincere thanks to you.You are a very kind person in my heart , to be honest ,When I arrived in this city ,I felt quiet lonely and afraid. my en

请求帮忙批改一篇小作文,英语,急用! 谢谢Dear Jenny ,I am writing this letter to express my sincere thanks to you.You are a very kind person in my heart , to be honest ,When I arrived in this city ,I felt quiet lonely and afraid. my en
请求帮忙批改一篇小作文,英语,急用! 谢谢
Dear Jenny ,
I am writing this letter to express my sincere thanks to you.
You are a very kind person in my heart , to be honest ,When I arrived in this city ,I felt quiet lonely and afraid. my english wasn’t so good that i couldn’t take bus by myself. I have a lot preparation to do especially before the new term stars .Fortunately I met you . I still remember that you took me to go to the local library and buy some equipments from market. When I have difficulties with my English language or have s homesick ,you always stay with me and help me overcome difficulties.
I feel it so lucky to have met you and been a good friend with you .I’d like to invite you come to my house to join a meal with me .and.I hope you will give me the chance to return your kindness.
Yours sincerely
Hayley

请求帮忙批改一篇小作文,英语,急用! 谢谢Dear Jenny ,I am writing this letter to express my sincere thanks to you.You are a very kind person in my heart , to be honest ,When I arrived in this city ,I felt quiet lonely and afraid. my en
Dear Jenny ,
I am writing this letter to express my sincere thanks to you.
You are a very kind person in my heart , to be honest , when I arrived in this city, I felt quite lonely and afraid. My english wasn’t so good so that I couldn’t take the bus by myself. I had a lot of preparation to do especially before the new term started .Fortunately I met you . I still remember that you took me to go to the local library and bought some equipments from the market. When I have difficulties with my English language or have s homesick, you always stay with me and help me overcome the difficulties.
I feel so lucky to meet you and been a good friend with you. I’d like to invite you come to my house to join a meal with me. And I hope you will give me a chance to return your kindness.
Your sincerely
Hayley
你犯了很多语法错误啊.第三行when不应该大写,quiet是安静,quite是“很”,第四行I没大写,so that句型不能用.take bus中间加the,have要用过去时,第五行stars应该是started,第六行buy要用过去时,from market中间要加the,第七行overcome difficulties中间加the.第八行feel直接加so lucky,同时have met要用meet.join a meal 要改成have a meal.and大写,并且多了一个句号.结尾应该是your sincerely.最大的问题是你标点前面（句子最后一个单词和标点之间）不能空格,标点后面（句子开始的地方）要空格.这些错误在上面已经被我全部修正了.祝你作文写的越来越好.

I'do like to invite you to my home to have dinner with me.

Dear Jenny ,
I am writing this letter to express my sincere thanks to you.
You are a very kind person in my heart , to be honest ,When I arrived in this city ,I felt quiet lonely and afraid. ...

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Dear Jenny ,
I am writing this letter to express my sincere thanks to you.
You are a very kind person in my heart , to be honest ,When I arrived in this city ,I felt quiet lonely and afraid. my english wasn’t so good that i couldn’t take bus by myself. I have a lot preparation to do especially before the new term stars .Fortunately I met you . I still remember that you took me to go to the local library and buy some equipments from market. When I have difficulties with my English language or have s homesick ,you always stay with me and help me overcome difficulties.
I feel it so lucky to have met you and been a good friend with you .I’d like to invite you come to my house to join a meal with me .and.I hope you will give me the chance to return your kindness.
Yours sincerely
Hayley

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