英语高手请批改一下这篇文章这是一篇关于“此地无银三百两”的故事 There is no money in this placeLong,long ago,there was a rich man in a town called Zhang San.One day,he was stay in his house and looked at his money.He tho

英语高手请批改一下这篇文章这是一篇关于“此地无银三百两”的故事 There is no money in this placeLong,long ago,there was a rich man in a town called Zhang San.One day,he was stay in his house and looked at his money.He tho
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这是一篇关于“此地无银三百两”的故事
There is no money in this place
Long,long ago,there was a rich man in a town called Zhang San.
One day,he was stay in his house and looked at his money.He though,’ My house is not big enough to put my money,I must look for a place to put it.’ Soon,he saw the garden and decided to put his money in the garden.
He went to the garden and put the money in the ground.After a minute,he though,’ If a thief come to my house and take my money away,I will become poor.I must tell the thief not to take my money away.’ So he wrote ‘There is no money in this place’ on the wall.
Zhang San has a neighbour called Wang er.He looked it and took the money away.But he was worried about who took away the money.So he wrote ‘Your neighbour has never taken your money.’
How silly the two men was!

英语高手请批改一下这篇文章这是一篇关于“此地无银三百两”的故事 There is no money in this placeLong,long ago,there was a rich man in a town called Zhang San.One day,he was stay in his house and looked at his money.He tho
目前找到的 :...(重要的错误你没怎么改..)
there was a rich man in a town called Zhang San.
这个called的位置不太好,可能引起歧义
.请紧接被修饰词
he was stay 我..还是无言
He though,’
thought
My house is not big enough to put my money,
这里用的to put my money不太好...
he saw the garden 用his garden更好
If a thief come to my house and take my money away,I will become poor.
comes,takes
He looked it look是vi.这里应该用saw
saw this或者 saw Zhang San hide his money都可以
(补...He saw Zhang San hide his money 为了万无一失..,明确一下主语是Wang Er会更好)
But he was worried about
ABOUT后面放这个从句不太好.而且时态不对
How silly the two men was!men 用were...

Zhang San has 时态好像不对
If a thief come to my house and take my money away, I will become poor.
comes, takes
come改成comes take改成takes，三单

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There is no money in this place(题目)
Long, long ago, there was a rich man in a town called Zhang San.
One day, he was stay in his house and looked at his money. He though,’ M...

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There is no money in this place(题目)
Long, long ago, there was a rich man in a town called Zhang San.
One day, he was stay in his house and looked at his money. He though,’ My house is not big enough to put my money, I must look for a place to put it.’ Soon, he saw the garden and decided to put his money in the garden.
He went to the garden and put the money in the ground. After a minute, he though,’ If a thief come to my house and take my money away, I will become poor. I must tell the thief not to take my money away.’ So he wrote ‘There is no money in this place’ on the wall.
Zhang San had a neighbour called Wang Er. He saw Zhang San hide his money and took the money away. But he was worried about Zhang San knows who took away the money. So he wrote ‘Your neighbour has never taken your money.’ on the wall.
How silly the two men were!

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Long,long ago , there was a rich man in a town called Zhang San . 中的 called 不合适。

Long, long ago, there was a rich man in a town called Zhang San.
One day, he was stay in his house and looked at his money. He though,’ My house is not big enough to put my money, I must look for...

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Long, long ago, there was a rich man in a town called Zhang San.
One day, he was stay in his house and looked at his money. He though,’ My house is not big enough to put my money, I must look for a place to put it.’ Soon, he saw the garden and decided to put his money in the garden.
He went to the garden and put the money in the ground. After a minute, he though,’ If a thief come to my house and take my money away, I will become poor. I must tell the thief not to take my money away.’ So he wrote ‘There is no money in this place’ on the wall.
Zhang San had a neighbour called Wang Er. He saw Zhang San hide his money and took the money away. But he was worried about Zhang San knows who took away the money. So he wrote ‘Your neighbour has never taken your money.’ on the wall.
How silly the two men were!

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此为我根据你的意思所做的更改:
There is no money in this place
Long, long ago, there was a rich man called Zhang San in a town.
One day, he staid home and looked at his money.
He thought to himsel...

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此为我根据你的意思所做的更改:
There is no money in this place
Long, long ago, there was a rich man called Zhang San in a town.
One day, he staid home and looked at his money.
He thought to himself,”my house is not big enough to put my money in. I will have to find a bigger place to hide it in.’
Later, he saw his garden and made his mind to put his money in the garden.
He went to the garden and concealed the money under the ground. Suddenly, an idea came to his head,’ if a thief ever comes to my house and takes my money away, I will become poor. I have to inform the thief not to take my money.’
So he wrote on the wall saying ‘There is no money in this place’.
Zhang San had a neighbor called Wang er. Wang er saw the words on the wall and stole all the money. But he was afraid that Zhang San would be suspicious of him, so he wrote instead ‘Your neighbor has never taken your money.’
How silly were the two men!

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