帮我看一下这篇文章是否有什么语法错误或这可以再润色的It talked about The Jacksons’ special experience.Jackson took his children to go camping in the Yellowstone National Park .They met a strange man called Charlie Forster .

帮我看一下这篇文章是否有什么语法错误或这可以再润色的It talked about The Jacksons’ special experience.Jackson took his children to go camping in the Yellowstone National Park .They met a strange man called Charlie Forster .
帮我看一下这篇文章是否有什么语法错误或这可以再润色的
It talked about The Jacksons’ special experience.Jackson took his children to go camping in the Yellowstone National Park .They met a strange man called Charlie Forster .Charlie told him a big disaster is coming.He said :with strong earthquake,the earth would be destroyed,and all across the world would become sea.There would be no place for people living on.Soon,governments realized that the earth will be destroyed in a very short time.they had to start to build the arks as quickly as they could.At last the disaster was coming.The survivors got through the difficulties with the help of each other.
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帮我看一下这篇文章是否有什么语法错误或这可以再润色的It talked about The Jacksons’ special experience.Jackson took his children to go camping in the Yellowstone National Park .They met a strange man called Charlie Forster .
通常,一本书或电影的故事叙述用一般现在时.
It is （这里的it是一本书或一出电影吗?如果是,talked要改为is ) about the(T不必大写) Jacksons’ special experience.One day（加上One day） Jackson takes his children for a camp（ to go camping 表达显得累赘,改为for a camp ）in the Yellowstone National Park .They meet a strange man called Charlie Forster .Charlie tells him a big disaster were（is改为 were,虚拟语气）coming.He says that with a （加上a）strong earthquake happening,the earth would be destroyed,and all （across删去） the world would become a （加上a）sea.There would be no place for people to live in（living改为to live；on改为in）.Soon,governments know about that（realized that the earth will be destroyed in a very short time改为know about that.).They( had to 删去)start to build the arks as quickly as they can (could改为can).At last the disaster came（虚拟语气）.The survivors smooth away（got through改为smooth away） the difficulties by helping（with the help of改为by helping ）each other.
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It is about the Jacksons’ special experience.One day Jackson takes his children for a camp in the Yellowstone National Park .There they meet a strange man called Charlie Forster .Charlie tells him a big disaster were coming.He says that with a strong earthquake happening,the earth would be destroyed,and all the world would become a sea.There would be no place for people to live in.Soon,governments know about that.They start to build the arks as quickly as they can .At last the disaster came.The survivors smooth away the difficulties by helping each other.
灾难片大师：a master of disaster films.
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taked---took living on--living in very short ---shorter

It is about The Jacksons’ special experiences. Jackson took his children to a camping in Yellowstone National Park .They met a stranger who called himself Charlie Forster. Charlie told him a big disas...

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It is about The Jacksons’ special experiences. Jackson took his children to a camping in Yellowstone National Park .They met a stranger who called himself Charlie Forster. Charlie told him a big disaster was coming. He said, 'Because of a powerful earthquake, the earth might be destroyed, and it might be changed into a sea all across the world. There would be no place for people to live on. Within a short time, the government would realize that the earth will be destroyed before long. They had to start to build the arks as quickly as they could.At last the disaster really came. The survivors got through the difficulties with the help of each other.
talk about 谈论，指的是人的交谈；文章等是“关于”
experience 可数时，经历；不可数时，经验
引用的话的引号不全，在哪里结束？
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The film is about the Jackson's special experience. Jackson, the hero in the film, took his children to the Yellowstone Park on vacation, where they met a strange guy called Charlie Forster, who told ...

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The film is about the Jackson's special experience. Jackson, the hero in the film, took his children to the Yellowstone Park on vacation, where they met a strange guy called Charlie Forster, who told him that a disaster was about to happen. He revealed that the earth would be destroyed by an earthquake, and would turn into a world of sea. And there would be no place for people to live in. After some time, governments of countries were also informed of the news that the world would be destroyed in no time. So, they decided to build an ark as quickly as they could. At last, the disaster was indeed coming and, luckily for some people, they survived with the help of each other.
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有些细节要修改，你自己仔细对比，因为无法标示，要仔细看。
.... where they met a strange man called Charlie Forster .Charlie told him a big disaster was coming.He said : with a strong earthquake,the earth would be destroyed,an...

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有些细节要修改，你自己仔细对比，因为无法标示，要仔细看。
.... where they met a strange man called Charlie Forster .Charlie told him a big disaster was coming.He said : with a strong earthquake,the earth would be destroyed,and all the world would become sea.There would be no place for people to live in.Soon,the governments realized that the earth would be destroyed in a very short time.They had to start to build the arks as quickly as they could.At last the disaster came. The survivors got through the difficulties by helping one another.

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