哪位英语高手帮我看看这个语句子语法错在哪了?3.There was some bad news that was seen by me last night,at the moment,the idea in my mind was that I would like to become a superman and to kill the humans that have a behavior unimagin

哪位英语高手帮我看看这个语句子语法错在哪了?3.There was some bad news that was seen by me last night,at the moment,the idea in my mind was that I would like to become a superman and to kill the humans that have a behavior unimagin
哪位英语高手帮我看看这个语句子语法错在哪了?
3.There was some bad news that was seen by me last night,at the moment,the idea in my mind was that I would like to become a superman and to kill the humans that have a behavior unimaginable and abnormal.

哪位英语高手帮我看看这个语句子语法错在哪了?3.There was some bad news that was seen by me last night,at the moment,the idea in my mind was that I would like to become a superman and to kill the humans that have a behavior unimagin
如果只针对语法,修改如下：
There was some bad news that was seen by me last night.At the moment,the idea in my mnd was that I would like to become a superman and to kill the people that have an unimaginable and abnormal behavior.
如果你用human是指人类,people是人们.behavior不用复数,他们可能有着同样的行为.
被动语态用得太多了,读着有点累.
修改如下,是否通顺一点?
I saw some bad news last night.An idea went through my mind at that moment.I would like to be a superman to kill those people who have such unimaginable and abnormal behavior.

unimaginable and abnormal作为形容词，修饰behavior，应该放在behavior前面，而且不是 a behavior，这个词很少用复数，只有当表示学术研究的对象是才说“behaviors”。

前面的没问题，后面有问题，应该改成There was some bad news that was seen by me last night, at the moment, the idea in my mind was that I would like to become a superman and kill the people who have unimaginable and ab...

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前面的没问题，后面有问题，应该改成There was some bad news that was seen by me last night, at the moment, the idea in my mind was that I would like to become a superman and kill the people who have unimaginable and abnormal behaviors.

wuold like to do something and do something ,后面不需要加 to
who 来形容那些人的，应该是不可以用that的， 那些是什么样子的人呢，当然是形容词在前面啦，反常的，变态的行为，这里的这些行为应该是不同的多种多样的，behavior可以加S也可以不加。
human复数是people

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1) 基本没有错,除了 a behavoir 应该改成 behavoirs.
2）但是你的句子特别的累赘，可以大大简化。把“短话”变成“长说”无论在哪个文化里都不是好的习惯。

When I saw those bad news last night, the idea in my mind was that I hope to become a superman and kill the people who behaviors abnormally.


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