请懂英语的哥哥姐姐帮我看看我的演讲稿!This me Hello,every one!My name is Li Hao Wei.My English name is Mike Miller.I am a 13 years old boy.I live in the beautiful city of Nanchang.I am in Nanchang Railway No.1 Middle School.And I am

请懂英语的哥哥姐姐帮我看看我的演讲稿!This me Hello,every one!My name is Li Hao Wei.My English name is Mike Miller.I am a 13 years old boy.I live in the beautiful city of Nanchang.I am in Nanchang Railway No.1 Middle School.And I am
请懂英语的哥哥姐姐帮我看看我的演讲稿!
This me
Hello,every one!
My name is Li Hao Wei.My English name is Mike Miller.I am a 13 years old boy.I live in the beautiful city of Nanchang.I am in Nanchang Railway No.1 Middle School.And I am in Class15,Grade 7.
In school,my favorite subject is English.Perhaps someone thinks it's difficult to study well.But I like it.Because I think it's very interesting.I belive that if you try your best,everything can be done well.
I also like sports very much.Such as,running,badminton and so on.
There are three people in my family.They're my father,my mother and I.And I like them very much!
OK.This is me .If you like me.Please remember me——a sunny boy!
有错的地方就只出来!

请懂英语的哥哥姐姐帮我看看我的演讲稿!This me Hello,every one!My name is Li Hao Wei.My English name is Mike Miller.I am a 13 years old boy.I live in the beautiful city of Nanchang.I am in Nanchang Railway No.1 Middle School.And I am
This me
this is me
Hello,every one!
My name is Li Hao Wei.My English name is Mike Miller.I am a 13 years old boy.I live in the (用a更好)beautiful city of Nanchang.I am in Nanchang Railway No.1 Middle School.And I am in Class15,Grade 7.
In school,my favorite subject is English.Perhaps someone thinks it's difficult to study well.But I like it.Because I think it's very interesting.I belive that if you try your best,everything can be done well.
I also like sports very much.Such as（改为for example因为such as不能单独成句）,running,badminton and so on.
There are three people in my family.They're my father,my mother and I（改为me,宾格更谦虚合适）.And I like（可以用love.them very much!
OK.This is me .If you like me.Please remember me——a sunny boy!
总的来说还是很不错的,加油

"I am a 13 years old boy"--------i am a 13-year-old boy
其它地方还行.加油加油

呵呵,南昌同乡...幸会...
我帮你看看吧...
This is me.
every one要连在一起，当然如果不用Hello ,而用Good morning/afternoon,boys and girls/ladies and gentlemen会更正式一点，．
it's difficult to study (English)well 这个只是加了更通一点...

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呵呵,南昌同乡...幸会...
我帮你看看吧...
This is me.
every one要连在一起，当然如果不用Hello ,而用Good morning/afternoon,boys and girls/ladies and gentlemen会更正式一点，．
it's difficult to study (English)well 这个只是加了更通一点，不是很大的问题．
Such as小写 ，如果换成to name a few会更好，like--love语气加强会更好．
I also like sports 改成I am fond of这个语气会更好
写得还是很好的，铁一中的小朋友，就初中的水平来说，应该还是可以的，没什么太大的问题，就这样上去演讲就可以了，演讲关键的还是读的语气，要演讲的比较有感情才好哦，要有轻有重．

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i live in the beautiful city-----------i live in a beautiful city
belive 这个拼写错误

This me 去掉
Hello 最好改为GOOD MORNING OR GOOD AFTERNOON
I STUDY in Nanchang Railway No.1 Middle School