麻烦语法高手帮我改一下Book JournalA brother’s Journey,written by Richard B.Pelzer is an astonishing book.No matter if you look from the way he sets the story or the way he told the story,it was perfect.The memories of mine told me that s

麻烦语法高手帮我改一下Book JournalA brother’s Journey,written by Richard B.Pelzer is an astonishing book.No matter if you look from the way he sets the story or the way he told the story,it was perfect.The memories of mine told me that s
麻烦语法高手帮我改一下
Book Journal
A brother’s Journey,written by Richard B.Pelzer is an astonishing book.No matter if you look from the way he sets the story or the way he told the story,it was perfect.The memories of mine told me that since the first time that I read the story,i couldn’t stop reading it.The story was irresistible.Since the book is a non-fiction,it was heartbreaking.The horror in this world was beyond my imagination.A childhood of abuse is something that not everyone had experienced.I personally would recommend this book to probably everyone that I know because I think it is meaningful to read the story,People like me never appreciated their lives (not even once).I never thought that I was lucky to have a loving family where people actually care about whether I’m hungry or not or whether I’m happy or not.I just thought if Richard ever had a family like mine,then this tragedy probably never would take its place.I think the more people read this book,the less chance that child abuse would take the place,I just wanted to do as much as I can myself to stop the child abusing around me.The book is inspiring many people; it also acts as a warning to the society.There are things that had to be stopped.Acting like a mirror of everyone’s life,A Brother’s Journey reflects and brings out the significance of everyone’s life.The book evokes people because as the story goes,it really reminds people and warns them to treasure whatever they have right now.The book delivers messages such as “don’t look at the past”; “don’t live in the past”; ‘live in the present for your future’.People should rather love each and become friends instead of hating each other and become foes.After all,life is too short.I learned to spend my life as efficient as I can for my own good.

麻烦语法高手帮我改一下Book JournalA brother’s Journey,written by Richard B.Pelzer is an astonishing book.No matter if you look from the way he sets the story or the way he told the story,it was perfect.The memories of mine told me that s
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A brother’s Journey,written by Richard B.Pelzer is an astonishing book.No matter *how you look at it:from the way *the author set the story or the way he told *it,it was perfect.*I remember *ever since the * time I started the book,I couldn’t stop reading.The story *is irresistible.Since the book is a non-fiction,it was heartbreaking(*不太明白你这句要表达什麼意思,因为一本书是否heartbreaking跟它的体裁 - fiction与否 - 没多大关系).The horror *described in the story *is beyond my imagination.Not everyone has experienced or come across a childhood of abuse.*Personally I recommend this book to everyone that I know,probably because I think *the story itself is meaningful.*An ordinary person may never appreciate his life (not even once括号内的话似乎重复了前面never一词的意思,建议删去).*By reading the book,I reflect that I am really lucky to have a loving family,to have people actually care *whether I’m hungry or happy.I *wonder if Richard (他是谁?为何突然出现?)ever had a family like mine,this tragedy *would have probably never taken place.I think *if more people can have the chance to read this book,the less cases of child abuse will occur.I just want to do as much as I can* to stop *child abuse around me.The book is inspiring *.It also acts as a warning to the society.There are *many things that should be stopped.*A Brother’s Journey,which acts like a mirror of our lives,brings out the significance in each and every one of us.It also evokes people*.*As the story goes,*it reminds and warns us to treasure whatever we have right now.The book delivers messages *that we should not turn back nor live in the past.*We should live in the present so as to go for the future.*People should treat each other like friends rather than enemies.After all,life is too short.*From this book,I learn to spend my life as efficient as I can for my own good.
ps:真不好意思说一声文章不是很流畅,尤其在后半部分,句子还是需要多花点心思编排一下才好.
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很久没有改过这样的文章了.

词汇量有了,但文笔欠些,写得不够生动,多读点英文原著会对你的写作有更大的帮.我帮你改下,供参考:
Book Journal
A Brother’s Journey, an astonishing book,is written by Richard B. Pelzer. No matter whether you look from the way he set the story...

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词汇量有了,但文笔欠些,写得不够生动,多读点英文原著会对你的写作有更大的帮.我帮你改下,供参考:
Book Journal
A Brother’s Journey, an astonishing book,is written by Richard B. Pelzer. No matter whether you look from the way he set the story or the way he told the story, it was perfect. I remembered that from the first time I read the story, I couldn’t help reading it. The story was so irresistible. Since the book was a non-fiction, it was heartbreaking. The horror in this world was beyond my imagination. An abusing childhood is something that most of us had not experienced.The reason that I recommend this book personally to everyone of you is because I think it meaningful and rewarding.People like me never appreciated their lives. I never thought that I was lucky to have a loving family which people actually care about such living and feeling of mine. I just thought if Richard ever had a family like mine, his tragedy would never happen. I think the more people read this book, the fewer chances the children’s abuse will happen, I just want to do what I can to stop the children from being abused around me. The book has inspired many people; it’s also acted as a movie to the society. There are many things for people to improve. Movies are like mirrors of people’s life, A Brother’s Journey reflects and brings out the significance of people’s life. The book evokes people.As the story goes, it really reminds people and warns them of the treasure whatever they own. The book gives messages such as “don’t look at the past”; “don’t live in the past”; ‘live in the present for your future’. People should rather love each other and be friendly instead of hating each other. After all, life is too short. I have learned how to live efficiently for my own good from this book.

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