英语作文在线点评修改一下我的作文：My dream lifein the future ,i will be very beautiful .i will go to work by car so i will be very happen everyday .i will live in a big and elegant house with my parents ,in my home,has a robort,it wi

英语作文在线点评修改一下我的作文：My dream lifein the future ,i will be very beautiful .i will go to work by car so i will be very happen everyday .i will live in a big and elegant house with my parents ,in my home,has a robort,it wi
英语作文在线点评
修改一下我的作文：My dream life
in the future ,i will be very beautiful .i will go to work by car so i will be very happen everyday .i will live in a big and elegant house with my parents ,in my home,has a robort,it will be do dull jobs everyday .On hoilday ,we'll go to Sydney Opera House.Go to there is my dream.What about you?

英语作文在线点评修改一下我的作文：My dream lifein the future ,i will be very beautiful .i will go to work by car so i will be very happen everyday .i will live in a big and elegant house with my parents ,in my home,has a robort,it wi
happen everyday 改为：happy every day 每天很快乐（ everyday每日的）
in my home,has a robort改为：There will be a robot in my house.= There is going to be a robot in my house.= We will have a robot in my house.
it will be do dull jobs everyday 改为：It will do dull jobs for us every day.( will + 动词原形,be/ do 不能用在一起）
On hoilday ,we'll go to Sydney Opera House.-改为：We'll go to Sydney Opera House to spend our holiday.或者用：During our holiday,we'll go to Sydney Opera House.
Go to there is my dream改为：Going there is my dream.( 用动名词做主语,there前省略to) 或者改为：Because I am looking forward to going there for a long time.

My life in dream
In the future, I will be very beautiful. I will go to work by car so I will be very happy everyday. I will live in a big and elegant house with my parents. In my home, there is a ...

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My life in dream
In the future, I will be very beautiful. I will go to work by car so I will be very happy everyday. I will live in a big and elegant house with my parents. In my home, there is a robot who will do dull jobs everyday. O n holidays, we'll go to the Sydney Opera House. Going to there is my dream. What about you、

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In my future, I will become beautiful. I will drive to work so I would be very happy (是想说高兴吗）everyday. My parents and I will buy a big and elegant house which will have a robot inside that'll do all t...

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In my future, I will become beautiful. I will drive to work so I would be very happy (是想说高兴吗）everyday. My parents and I will buy a big and elegant house which will have a robot inside that'll do all the dull work. On holidays, we'll visit the Sydney Opera House, it's always been my dream to visit. What is your dream life?

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happen 改为happy。开车上班和天天开心好像没有什么因果关系吧。用so有点不妥。 elegant一般做优雅解不大用来修饰房子。
i will live in a big and elegant house with my parents ,in my home,has a robort,it will be do dull jobs everyday
这句话问题较大。

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happen 改为happy。开车上班和天天开心好像没有什么因果关系吧。用so有点不妥。 elegant一般做优雅解不大用来修饰房子。
i will live in a big and elegant house with my parents ,in my home,has a robort,it will be do dull jobs everyday
这句话问题较大。
I will live in a big house with my parents. There will be a robort in my home. The robort can make dulls everyday.
倒数第二句话，there是副词不要to. 动词不能直接做主语，改成
going there is my dream

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1. 标题：My dream life - My life in dream
2. so I will be very happen everyday - so I will be very happy every day
3. 形容房子：big - large
4. in my home , has a robort - there is a robot in my ho...

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1. 标题：My dream life - My life in dream
2. so I will be very happen everyday - so I will be very happy every day
3. 形容房子：big - large
4. in my home , has a robort - there is a robot in my home .
5. it will be do dull jobs everyday . - it does dull jobs every day .
6. On holiday , - At holiday ,
7. Go to there is my dream . - Going there is my dream .
此外，每句的开头字母要大写，应该注意。

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修改：I hope I can be more beautiful in my future.I will be very happy if I can go work by my own car everyday.I want to live in a large and elegant house with my parents.In my house , there will be a ro...

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修改：I hope I can be more beautiful in my future.I will be very happy if I can go work by my own car everyday.I want to live in a large and elegant house with my parents.In my house , there will be a robort,it can help us to do daily housework that we don't want to do.On holidays,we'll go to Sydney Opera House,which is one of my dream.So,what about you?

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