帮我改一下我的英文信PO Box 571KENT TOWNSA 507129 March 2010The Rt Hon The Lord Mayer Michael Harbison ADELAIDE TOWN HALL128 King William StSA 5001Dear Sir,Thank you for inviting me to attend such a fun international student party. It is my

帮我改一下我的英文信PO Box 571KENT TOWNSA 507129 March 2010The Rt Hon The Lord Mayer Michael Harbison ADELAIDE TOWN HALL128 King William StSA 5001Dear Sir,Thank you for inviting me to attend such a fun international student party. It is my
帮我改一下我的英文信
PO Box 571
KENT TOWN
SA 5071
29 March 2010
The Rt Hon The Lord Mayer
Michael Harbison
ADELAIDE TOWN HALL
128 King William St
SA 5001
Dear Sir,
Thank you for inviting me to attend such a fun international student party. It is my honour to attend this party at Adelaide Town Hall King William Street on Friday night.
At the beginning I was not expecting to enjoy the foods, but your quiche, sausage rolls and little pies certainly surpassed my expectations! It was a great time with friends and girls. The euphonious music and fantastic performance are really surprised me. The skilful pianist on grand piano and Kola are all the shining point. Mr Harbison gave a speech with a humorous anecdote. And the Indian dancer with his unbelievable dancing skills deserve our of us a burst into applause
There is also a couple of things need to be improve, the party is for the international student, so there should supply some of the Asian food, such as noodles, tea, sushi. The party also should play some games to make everyone knew each other, not just talk with the schoolmates. However, I think the party place is not appropriate and it is too far from many schools, maybe supply a party bus, it could easily solve the problem.
Your Faithfully

帮我改一下我的英文信PO Box 571KENT TOWNSA 507129 March 2010The Rt Hon The Lord Mayer Michael Harbison ADELAIDE TOWN HALL128 King William StSA 5001Dear Sir,Thank you for inviting me to attend such a fun international student party. It is my
Dear Mr Harbison
Thank you for inviting me to attend such a interesting international student party.It was my honour to be part of it at Adelaide Town Hall (on King William Street) on a Friday night.
At the beginning I was not expecting to enjoy the food,but your quiche,sausage rolls and mini pies certainly surpassed my expectations!I had a great time with friends from different nationalities.The euphonious music and fantastic performance really surprised me.The skillful pianist on grand piano (在钢琴上的钢琴师?） and Kola were definitely the shining points of the evening.You made a speech with a humorous anecdote.And the Indian dancer with his unbelievable dancing skills deserve all of us a burst into applause (看不懂）
There was also a couple of things need to be improved.The party was for the international student,so the Asian food,such as noodles,tea,sushi etc should be provided.Some games should be organised to make everyone know each other a lot better,rather than just talking with the schoolmates.Moreover,I think the party place was not appropriate and it was too far from many schools.To make things easier for us,maybe some school buses should be arranged for picking up students.
Yours Faithfully