6级作文片段一篇,请大家帮我看看,语法,时态Having stayed in campus for years,some students start to thinking about what they can do after graduate .For instance,a part of them urgent to work after graduate .perhaps they look forward to

6级作文片段一篇,请大家帮我看看,语法,时态Having stayed in campus for years,some students start to thinking about what they can do after graduate .For instance,a part of them urgent to work after graduate .perhaps they look forward to
6级作文片段一篇,请大家帮我看看,语法,时态
Having stayed in campus for years,some students start to thinking about what they can do after graduate .
For instance,a part of them urgent to work after graduate .perhaps they look forward to a new life,obviously they are curious about this,and they even already boring with studying at school also some of them want to earn money as soon as possible.
Meanwhile,the other part of them planning on taking part in the entrance exams for postgraduate school .they hope to stay in campus continue .probably the society outside school perilous for them and afraid of finding a job .since they choose to get a higher degree at school.
In my opinion ,I tend to get a higher degree abroad after graduate.Because a bachelor` s degree can hardly qualify students for a competitive position,and go abroad could exercise me also I know my choice will mean a commitment of time and money,but it would surely lead to a prosperous future.

6级作文片段一篇,请大家帮我看看,语法,时态Having stayed in campus for years,some students start to thinking about what they can do after graduate .For instance,a part of them urgent to work after graduate .perhaps they look forward to
首段 应该是gratuate-graduation
第二段的首句同理 for instance后应该绝歌具体的例子 第二段额二三句是独立的句子还是从句?逗号句号分清楚 还有大小写 第三句中的this指代的是?第四句even-have already been
第三段首句参加研究生考试直接用take the GRE就ok countinue改adv
afraid加主语 since改so
四段 第一句米明白啥意思是说出过留学么?abroad改to study abroad competitive position不妥 改position in intensity competition
exercise改train also改and will取消 commitment用的不对 prosperous修饰future不恰当

Having stayed on campus for years，some students start to think about what they can do after graduation.
For instance, a part of them are urgent to work after graduation .Perhaps they look forward ...

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Having stayed on campus for years，some students start to think about what they can do after graduation.
For instance, a part of them are urgent to work after graduation .Perhaps they look forward to a new life. Obviously they are curious about this, and they are bored with studying at school already. They want to earn money as soon as possible.
Meanwhile, the other part of them plan to take part in the entrance exams for postgraduate school .they hope to stay on campus continue . the society outside school is probably perilous for them and they are afraid of finding a job, so they choose to get a higher degree at school.
In my opinion ,I tend to get a higher degree abroad after graduation. Because a bachelor's degree can hardly qualify students for a competitive position, and going abroad could enrich my life experience. Besides, I know my choice will mean a commitment of time and money, but it would surely lead to a prosperous future.

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Having stayed in campus for years，some students start to think about what they can do after graduation .
For instance, part of them are eager to work after graduation. Perhaps they'd like to look ...

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Having stayed in campus for years，some students start to think about what they can do after graduation .
For instance, part of them are eager to work after graduation. Perhaps they'd like to look forward to a new life, obviously they are curious about it, or they think it's boring to study at school and some of them want to earn money as soon as possible.
Meanwhile, the other part of them have planned to take part in the entrance exams for postgraduate school .They hope to stay in campus continuously to get a higher degree probably because they feel the society outside is full of competition and pressure and they are afraid of finding a job.
In my opinion ,I tend to get a higher degree abroad after graduation because a bachelor's degree can hardly qualify students for a competitive position, and going abroad could temper me. I know my choice will spare a lot of time and money, but I believe it would surely lead me to a bright future.

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