帮忙修改下我的英语哈,题目是《Smoking should be banned in all public areas》《Smoking should be banned in all public areas》I strongly believe that smoking should bebanned in all public areasWhy?Because smoking is aof wastes money as

帮忙修改下我的英语哈,题目是《Smoking should be banned in all public areas》《Smoking should be banned in all public areas》I strongly believe that smoking should bebanned in all public areasWhy?Because smoking is aof wastes money as
帮忙修改下我的英语哈,题目是《Smoking should be banned in all public areas》
《Smoking should be banned in all public areas》
I strongly believe that smoking should bebanned in all public areas
Why?
Because smoking is aof wastes money as well as affects our health and peoplewho have asthma can be harmed or even killed if they want to take a walk in thepark and if smoking was banned,then heart-related illnesses could possiblylower just like it did in the places where it was banned.I wouldn’t like towalk past a smoker that has a cigarette in his mouth because I wouldn’t like tobreath in the smoke and Second-hand smoke is just as bad as smoking.So I wishsmoking was banned.

帮忙修改下我的英语哈,题目是《Smoking should be banned in all public areas》《Smoking should be banned in all public areas》I strongly believe that smoking should bebanned in all public areasWhy?Because smoking is aof wastes money as
语法错误先不考虑的话,文章中关于希望禁烟的理由,没有能够非常有条理的说清楚,部分原因不合逻辑.不好意思比较直接点出来,因为三分之二的句子都需要进行部分改动,你是不是想表达下面的意思：
1、抽烟浪费钱,有害健康,举例：哮喘病人、降低患心血管类疾病概率
2、抽烟的人有口臭,影响交际.举例：不喜欢靠近抽烟的人,身上有怪味.
结论：希望禁烟

I strongly believe that smoking should be banned in all public areas
Why?
Because smoking not only wastes money but also affects our health .People who are suffered from asthma can be harmed o...

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I strongly believe that smoking should be banned in all public areas
Why?
Because smoking not only wastes money but also affects our health .People who are suffered from asthma can be harmed or even killed if they take a walk in the place where is full of smoking smell .If smoking was banned, there will be less heart desease . I don't like to walk past a smoker who has a cigarette in his mouth because I don't like to breath the smell. And second-hand smoking smell is bad for people's health. So I hope that smoking will be banned in all public places.

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