请问这篇英语短文能得几分?请根据下面提示,写一篇短文.词数不少于50.You are discussing the following picture with your English friend Jim.Now you are telling him how you understand the picture and what makes you think so.如

请问这篇英语短文能得几分?请根据下面提示,写一篇短文.词数不少于50.You are discussing the following picture with your English friend Jim.Now you are telling him how you understand the picture and what makes you think so.如
请问这篇英语短文能得几分?
请根据下面提示,写一篇短文.词数不少于50.You are discussing the following picture with your English friend Jim.Now you are telling him how you understand the picture and what makes you think so.如下：

如下：
Hey,Jim.What i see form the picture is that i think that it is worry of longer pencil laugh at shorter pencil,because it is obvious that shorter pencil used to have been used by someone,so,he must have made some works,it is these works that he reflects his value from.However longer pencil have not done some works.So i hope that he should be hard to learn experience from shorter pencil than to laugh at shorter pencil
第五档(13-15分)
1.完全完成了试题规定的任务。
2.覆盖所有要点。
3.应用了较多的语法结构和词汇。
4.语法结构或词汇方面有些许错误，但为尽力使用较复杂结构或较高级词汇所致;具备较强的语言运用能力。
5.有效地使用了语句间的连接成分
　第四档(10-12分)
1.完全完成了试题规定的任务。
2.虽漏掉1、2个次重点，但覆盖所有主要内容。
3.应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的次要点
4.语法结构或词汇方面应用基本准确，些许错误主要是因尝试较复杂语法结构或词汇所致。
5.应用简单的语句间的连接成分
　　第三档(7-9分)
1.基本完成了试题规定的任务。
2.虽漏掉一些内容，但覆盖所有主要内容
3.应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求
4.有一些语法结构或词汇方面的错误
5.应用简单的语句间的连接成
　第二档(4-6分)
1.未恰当完成试题规定的任务。
2.漏掉或未描述清楚一些主要内容
3.语法结构单调
4.有一些语法结构或词汇方面的错误
5.内容缺少连贯性。

请问这篇英语短文能得几分?请根据下面提示,写一篇短文.词数不少于50.You are discussing the following picture with your English friend Jim.Now you are telling him how you understand the picture and what makes you think so.如
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What i see form(拼写错误） the picture is that i think that it is worry of longer pencil laugh at shorter pencil,because it is obvious that shorter pencil used to have been used by someone,so,he must have made some works,it is these works that he reflects his value from.
这句太长了,你语法不是很好的时候尽量别用长句.
what I see from the picture is 和I think that作用一样,不需要重复
it is worry of longer pencil用法不对,要么去掉要么句子要重新写.
shorter pencil可以断句了
(the) shorter pencil
has been used by someone (其余的都多余,重复了）
because和so只用一个,不能两个都用在一个句子里,另外so后面不加逗号
works后面断句
I think it is these
去掉he
去掉from
However longer pencil have not done some works.
have应该是has,另外这句话应该是 However the longer pencil has not done any work yet.
So i hope that he should be hard to learn experience from shorter pencil than to laugh at shorter pencil
I hope改成I think
hard to learn experience from shorter pencil than to laugh at shorter pencil改成learning hard from the experience of the shorter pencil rather than to laugh at the shorter pencil.
15分满分的话,如果是小学作文我会给12.如果是初中大概9-11分,分年级以及进度不同.如果是高中那么5-8分左右吧.
按照后面的评分标准大概10左右

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提问者： 匿名 请根据下面提示，写一篇短文。词数不少于50. You are discussing the following picture with your English friend Jim. Now you are telling him how you understand the picture and what makes you think so. 如下：
如下：
Hey，Jim。What i see form the picture is that i think that it is worry of longer pencil laugh at shorter pencil，because it is obvious that shorter pencil used to have been used by someone，so，he must have made some works，it is these works that he reflects his value from。However longer pencil have not done some works。So i hope that he should be hard to learn experience from shorter pencil than to laugh at shorter pencil

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