看看有没有错的句子,急用!In March 28th,a mining accident happened in wangjialing mine.this was one of mining accidents in March.It tensed up our hearts again.Though many people go to the rescue,we still see a lot of dead.153 people trapped

看看有没有错的句子,急用!In March 28th,a mining accident happened in wangjialing mine.this was one of mining accidents in March.It tensed up our hearts again.Though many people go to the rescue,we still see a lot of dead.153 people trapped
看看有没有错的句子,急用!
In March 28th,a mining accident happened in wangjialing mine.this was one of mining accidents in March.It tensed up our hearts again.Though many people go to the rescue,we still see a lot of dead.153 people trapped in this mine disaster,and there was no informathion in 8 nights.We are disheartened to think that this will be also a sorrowful story.
The miracle of life occurred in the Ching Ming Festival,115 workers rescued one by one.all of the people was cheering for the strong life.Today we are still working to rescue,we never give up,because we still pray for the living life.
In 2006,the tv player soldiers’ sudden attack let us know a word :never abundon nor give up.It fire up everybody who against difficulties.A very ordinary soldier prove the word,because of his hard-working and insistence.He get what he wanted.In this mining accident,Both of the rescue team and the trapped person are not give up,so they also get it.The life saved because they insist.
To us,if we want to succed in doing something,we should also never give up.never give up hope,never give up chance,and never give up to do it.thought the path to victory is very difficult.so when we meet the difficult ,and you can’t resolve it at once.Just think abou the people who survive in the mine.Tell yourself not to give up,anything you can complete,just continue to try to do it,and the final victory belongs to you.

看看有没有错的句子,急用!In March 28th,a mining accident happened in wangjialing mine.this was one of mining accidents in March.It tensed up our hearts again.Though many people go to the rescue,we still see a lot of dead.153 people trapped
1.we still see a lot of dead.我觉得dead应该改为death.
2.153 people trapped in this mine disaster.trapped前面应该加上were,因为是被动.
3.and there was no informathion in 8 nights中的in 应改为at
4.115 workers rescued one by one同样是被动问题,rescued 加
5.all of the people was cheering for the strong life.was改为were
6.never abundon nor give up.It fire up everybody who against difficulties.A very ordinary soldier prove the word,abundon应该是abandon吧,译为放弃；还有三单或时态,不能把动词扔那不管
7.He get what he wanted.get应改为got,要考虑时态
8.are not give up改为are not giving up
9.The life saved because they insist.life改为lives,因为是好多条命；saved前加were,时态
10.To us改为as for us更好一点
11.and never give up to do it.give up 后面应加doing而不是to do
12.Just think abou the people who survive in the mine.survive 应改为survives
以后写作,要多注意时态,加油啊!不错!