请高手批改（8） Stop Smoking　　　　　　Stop Smoking　　Smoking is harmful to health.There are some dadake(致命的) oxford（毒性的） matieral in cageryt.It could increase the chance of lung cancer.It is harmful to heart.Smoking

请高手批改（8） Stop Smoking　　　　　　Stop Smoking　　Smoking is harmful to health.There are some dadake(致命的) oxford（毒性的） matieral in cageryt.It could increase the chance of lung cancer.It is harmful to heart.Smoking
请高手批改（8） Stop Smoking
　　　　　　Stop Smoking
　　Smoking is harmful to health.There are some dadake(致命的) oxford（毒性的） matieral in cageryt.It could increase the chance of lung cancer.It is harmful to heart.Smoking could result in many disece.
　　Getting rid of the smoking habit is not easy.Because there is a (成瘾的) matieral in cageryt.It let smoker depend on it.Mark Twin ever said :getting rid of the smoking habit is easy,I had taken many times.
　　In order to protect non-smokers from becoming smokers,measures should be taken to reduce the appeal of smoking.Now,many medicen orgnication advice fibidde smoking in public.The no smoking policy has come out.And the cageryt advitasment do not allow in medium.So let us stop smoking ,keep a health body.

请高手批改（8） Stop Smoking　　　　　　Stop Smoking　　Smoking is harmful to health.There are some dadake(致命的) oxford（毒性的） matieral in cageryt.It could increase the chance of lung cancer.It is harmful to heart.Smoking
Smoking is harmful to(the)health.There are some [dadake(致命的)(deadly) ][oxford（毒性的）( 去掉,致命本来就就有有毒的意思)] matieral(s) in cageryt（cigarette）.It(it指代不明) could increase the chance of lung cancer.It is harmful to （the）heart（看第一句,对健康有害不包括对心脏有害吗?）.Smoking could result in many disece（diseases）.(本段有些主语模糊不清,貌似smoking也可以,cigarette也可以)
　　Getting rid of the smoking habit is not easy[.Because(because)] there is a (成瘾的)(an addictive) matieral in cageryt(香烟?).It let smoker depend on it（此句多余,前面有addictive）.Mark Twin ever said :“getting rid of the smoking habit is easy,I had taken many times.“
　　In order to protect non-smokers from [becoming smokers(being addicted to smoking)],measures should be taken [to reduce the appeal of smoking(多余 )].Now,many medicen orgnication advice fibidde smoking in public(不太懂啥意思).The no smoking policy has [come out(been carried out)].And the cageryt(香烟?) advitasment(s)（广告的拼写是?查字典） [do not allow(are not allowed)] in medium(s).So let us stop smoking ,keep a health body(and keep us healthy).

　　Smoking is harmful to(the)health. There are some [dadake(致命的)(deadly) ][oxford（毒性的）( 去掉，致命本来就就有有毒的意思)] matieral(s) in cageryt（cigarette）. It(it指代不明) could increase the chance of lung cancer. It is h...

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　　Smoking is harmful to(the)health. There are some [dadake(致命的)(deadly) ][oxford（毒性的）( 去掉，致命本来就就有有毒的意思)] matieral(s) in cageryt（cigarette）. It(it指代不明) could increase the chance of lung cancer. It is harmful to （the）heart（看第一句，对健康有害不包括对心脏有害吗？）. Smoking could result in many disece（diseases）.(本段有些主语模糊不清，貌似smoking也可以，cigarette也可以)
　　Getting rid of the smoking habit is not easy[. Because(because)] there is a (成瘾的)(an addictive) matieral in cageryt(香烟？). It let smoker depend on it（此句多余，前面有addictive）. Mark Twin ever said : “getting rid of the smoking habit is easy, I had taken many times.“
　　In order to protect non-smokers from [becoming smokers(being addicted to smoking)], measures should be taken [to reduce the appeal of smoking(多余 )]. Now, many medicen orgnication advice fibidde smoking in public(不太懂啥意思). The no smoking policy has [come out(been carried out)]. And the cageryt(香烟？) advitasment(s)（广告的拼写是？查字典） [do not allow(are not allowed)] in medium(s). So let us stop smoking , keep a health body(and keep us healthy).

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