帮我检查作文today is Monday,it was a fine day.we feel very hot .my younger brother`s english name is jimmy ,he gets up very early .about 7 o`clock ,he got to school had his classes .about 12 o`clock ,he had lunch at his school .in afternoon ,th

帮我检查作文today is Monday,it was a fine day.we feel very hot .my younger brother`s english name is jimmy ,he gets up very early .about 7 o`clock ,he got to school had his classes .about 12 o`clock ,he had lunch at his school .in afternoon ,th
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today is Monday,it was a fine day.we feel very hot .my younger brother`s english name is jimmy ,he gets up very early .about 7 o`clock ,he got to school had his classes .about 12 o`clock ,he had lunch at his school .in afternoon ,the weather is bad ,this is I thought.I don't want to go out,you could fry eggs on the street.but jimmy was had his P.E classes .
after school .jimmy played his small football at home .I don't know why my younger brother didn't felt tired .he was so naughty.
my yuonger brother was very lovely .his school day was very happy
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帮我检查作文today is Monday,it was a fine day.we feel very hot .my younger brother`s english name is jimmy ,he gets up very early .about 7 o`clock ,he got to school had his classes .about 12 o`clock ,he had lunch at his school .in afternoon ,th
Today is monday.It was a fine day and we all felt very hot.My younger brother,Jimmy(不必指出是英文名),got up very early in the morning at(记得加at) about 7 o'clock.He went to school（注意不定式用法） to have his classes.At about 12 o'clock,he had his lunch.In the afternoon,the weather is bad(干嘛说是你认为).I didn't want to go on the street because you can even fry an egg on it.But Jimmy had his PE classes.And after that,he played with（注意with） his little football at home.I can't understand why he is never tired.He is too naughty.
My younger brother is so lovely,and he had a good day in school.
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Today is Monday，and it was a fine day. We feel very hot .My younger brother`s English name is Jimmy .He got up very early .About 7 o`clock ,he got to school and had his classes . About 12 o`clock ,...

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Today is Monday，and it was a fine day. We feel very hot .My younger brother`s English name is Jimmy .He got up very early .About 7 o`clock ,he got to school and had his classes . About 12 o`clock , he had lunch at his school . 【In afternoon ，the weather is bad ,this is I thought. I didn't want to go out,you could fry eggs on the street. 】（？）But jimmy was having his P.E classes .
after school .jimmy played his small football at home . I don't know why didn't my younger brother feel tired .He is so naughty,
but also very lovely . His school day is very happy.

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开头应该大写，it is，不是was, English 开头要大写， got up at a bout 7.. to have his classes . At 12.. in the afternoon , was bad was I thought ,did not want.. was having ,did not know feel tired He ...

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开头应该大写，it is，不是was, English 开头要大写， got up at a bout 7.. to have his classes . At 12.. in the afternoon , was bad was I thought ,did not want.. was having ,did not know feel tired He My is very lovely
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第一行 was 改成 is;
第二行 about 7 前面加 at；got to school 改成 went to school; about 12 前面加at
第三行 in afternoon 中间加 the;
第三行 weather is bad 改成 was
第四行 do 改成 did(注意时态保持一致，后面的还有类似问题)
第五行 was had 去掉 was

Yesterday was monday.he got up very early...in the afternoon...the weather was bad.this is what i thought.didn't.was bad in his p.e class..i didn't know thy my younger brother don't feel tired...
my younger brother is vert lovely.
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