Every four yeas,the loser of election of U.S.president,who in a great pain,would makea speech .It’s a tradition of U.S .Someone once asked Stevensen,how are you feeling when you walk alone on the street afteryou fail in the U.S presidential electio

Every four yeas,the loser of election of U.S.president,who in a great pain,would makea speech .It’s a tradition of U.S .Someone once asked Stevensen,how are you feeling when you walk alone on the street afteryou fail in the U.S presidential electio
Every four yeas,the loser of election of U.S.president,who in a great pain,would make
a speech .It’s a tradition of U.S .
Someone once asked Stevensen,how are you feeling when you walk alone on the street afteryou fail in the U.S presidential election He replied with the words of Lincoln ,"it's just like a little boy who stumble in the darkness.He can't cry becausehe is grown up .But the pain is so heavy,which is difficult to laugh."

Every four yeas,the loser of election of U.S.president,who in a great pain,would makea speech .It’s a tradition of U.S .Someone once asked Stevensen,how are you feeling when you walk alone on the street afteryou fail in the U.S presidential electio
楼主第一句话,除了who in a great pain,中间加一个was以外,后面的would make 就要改作would makes.因为我不知道楼主到底想要表达的是在一场选举中的失败方,还是每场选举中的失败者,如果是想表达复数,改作复数即可,还要把a去掉,痛苦是无法用冠词来衡量的.然后其他的感觉你这句话虽然没错,但是总觉得有些混乱,可不可以把the loser of election of U.S. president改作 the loser of U.S. presidential election,感觉要清爽的多.第二句话看似没问题,但是要把it换成that,指代的是上面第一句话说的事情.第三句话中how are you feeling感觉明显中文化了,应该改成What's your feeling,之后的after you改成after your,或者不要you直接把fail改作（when you have been）defeated,之所以这么改一是为了句子完整,二是前面已经有you这个主语了省略,之后的林肯的话没什么大问题,stumbles into更标准些,he is grown up中的is改成has,另外最后一句话我总感觉好像没说完一样,原因可能是最后的which引导的定语从句主语不明确,如果pain是主语的话,因为句子还原后,最后一句就成了dfficult to laugh the pain,改的办法就是不要把最后一句变成定语从句,变成宾语从句就行了,最后我把全文修改一遍.
Every four years, the loser of U.S. presidential election,who was in great pain,would makes a speech . That‘s a tradition of U.S .Someone once asked Stevensen, "What's your feeling when you walk alone on the street after defeated in the U.S presidential election ? " He replied with the words of Lincoln , "it's just like a little boy who stumbled into the darkness. He can't cry because he has grown up .But the pain was so heavy that was difficult to laugh."另外我感觉楼主用的句式好像不太好掌握,建议其实有时候多用单句式,少用复杂句式,至少可以提高表达的准确性

1，the loser of election of U.S. president,who in a great pain这里改成这样the loser of U.S. president election ，who was in a great pain,
2，He can't cry because he is grown up .应该是He can't cry because he has grown up .

Every four yeas, the loser of election of U.S. president,who was in a great pain,would make a speech . It was a tradition of U.S .Someone once asked Stevensen, "how are you feeling when you walk al...

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Every four yeas, the loser of election of U.S. president,who was in a great pain,would make a speech . It was a tradition of U.S .Someone once asked Stevensen, "how are you feeling when you walk alone on the street after you fail in the U.S presidential election ? " He replied with the words of Lincoln , "it's just like a little boy who stumble in the darkness. He can't cry becausehe is grown up .But the pain is so heavy, which is difficult to laugh."
我就在who 后面加了一个was，总觉得这里少了，然后就是双引号了

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