Firstly,the instruction from teacher plays an important role in the students’ studying passion.For instance,our English teacher often in class plays some American blockbuster from paramount pictures int.or universal picture Co.and accompanies with

Firstly,the instruction from teacher plays an important role in the students’ studying passion.For instance,our English teacher often in class plays some American blockbuster from paramount pictures int.or universal picture Co.and accompanies with
Firstly,the instruction from teacher plays an important role in the students’ studying passion.For instance,our English teacher often in class plays some American blockbuster from paramount pictures int.or universal picture Co.and accompanies with vivid lectures.In this interesting way,students’ passion for this subject can be fully inspired.The more impassioned teacher’s teaching is,the more impassioned students’ studying is.In addition,if students can have a chance to go to the laboratory doing the research with the professor such as doing chemical experiments,they can apply the theory that studied in the class into the practice and might find some interest from it.

Firstly,the instruction from teacher plays an important role in the students’ studying passion.For instance,our English teacher often in class plays some American blockbuster from paramount pictures int.or universal picture Co.and accompanies with

　　Firstly, the instruction from teacher plays an important role in the students’ studying passion.

　　【点评】

• teacher 是可数名词,用a teacher 指类别)

• 在passion【热情】中起作用不如说成在passional interest【强烈的兴趣】中.

• studying 如果作为分词定语表示“具有学习特征的不太妥当”,如果作为动名词表示“具有学习属性的”,其实用名词 study完全可以表示.

• 把前置定语studying改为介词短语作后置定语,或者用interest in their studies 【学习中的兴趣】,或者用interest of their studies【属于学习的兴趣】.

　　For instance, our English teacher often in class plays some American blockbuster from paramount pictures int. or universal picture Co. and accompanies with vivid lectures.

　　【点评】

• 1、often 和in class 两个不同的状语插入在主语和谓语动词之间显得凝重,把in class调整到后面.

• 2、paramount pictures int 和 universal picture Co 都是专有名词,应该大写.

• 3、some 修饰应该复数名词 American blockbusters

• 4、teacher accompanies with …（不及物动词）意思是“老师用作陪伴”,改为teacher accompanies the blockbuster with …【老师同时给电影作生动的讲解】（及物动词）

　　In this interesting way, students’ passion for this subject can be fully inspired. The more impassioned teacher’s teaching is, the more impassioned students’ studying is.

　　【点评】

• in this interesting way 改为in such an interesting way

• teacher’s teaching 前加the

• the more impassioned students’ studying is 改为the more impassioned the students are in their study

　　In addition, if students can have a chance to go to the laboratory doing the research with the professor such as doing chemical experiments, they can apply the theory that studied in the class into the practice and might find some interest from it.

　　【点评】

• 1、doing research 改为doing some research

• 2、定语从句that studied 改为被动语态的完成时态that has been studied

• 3、in the class 去掉定冠词

　　全文修改如下：

　　Firstly, the instruction from a teacher plays an important role in the students’ passional interest in/of their studies. For instance, our English teacher often plays in class some American blockbusters from Paramount Pictures Int. or Universal Picture Co. and accompanies it with vivid lectures. In such an interesting way, students’ interest for this subject can be fully inspired. The more impassioned the teacher’s teaching is, the more impassioned the students are in their study. In addition, if students can have a chance to go to the laboratory doing some research with the professor such as doing chemical experiments, they can apply the theory that has been studied in class into the practice and might find some interest from it.

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