谁帮忙找找错误Thank you for reading my letter!My name is XXX.I am a male.I was born in Hebei Chengde,in August 21,1990.1997 -2002 years - Primary School in Hebei Chengde railway primary school.2002 -2006 years - Chengde in Hebei Normal Univers

谁帮忙找找错误Thank you for reading my letter!My name is XXX.I am a male.I was born in Hebei Chengde,in August 21,1990.1997 -2002 years - Primary School in Hebei Chengde railway primary school.2002 -2006 years - Chengde in Hebei Normal Univers
谁帮忙找找错误
Thank you for reading my letter!
My name is XXX.I am a male.I was born in Hebei Chengde,in August 21,1990.
1997 -2002 years - Primary School in Hebei Chengde railway primary school.
2002 -2006 years - Chengde in Hebei Normal University Affiliated Middle School.
2006 -2009 years - The First High School of Chengde.
My father is XXX.Born in January 27,1963 in Chengde,Hebei.
My father is in Beijing Railway Bureau,vice president of construction department.
My mother is XXX.Born March 10,1964 in Chengde,Hebei.
My mother is the Minister of Hebei Chengde Lolo Company Limited quality control.
I am personality and lively,cheerful and can get along well with people.I like books,music and I also like mobility.My parents are very busy.So I developed an independent and strong personality.I can fit in a new environment very quickly.At the same time my parents require me very strictly.In school,I have maintained a good performance and excellent quality.I grew up in this environment.I am very confident in commundouting………...
As my teacher had been studyed in university in Korea.I contacted some information about Korean culture from her.Through these I have some knowledge of the customs.I decided to study in Korea.Parents have also supported strongly .And under conditions of my family,after high school I resolutely decided to go to Korea to continue studying.My parents support me not only in spirit but also in money.I have been studyed in Konkuk University Language Institute for more than eight months.I worked hard to learn,attendance has remained 100%.In the future I would like to try my best to study.

谁帮忙找找错误Thank you for reading my letter!My name is XXX.I am a male.I was born in Hebei Chengde,in August 21,1990.1997 -2002 years - Primary School in Hebei Chengde railway primary school.2002 -2006 years - Chengde in Hebei Normal Univers
am （personality and） lively
personality是名词哦
其他我没觉得什么错

你这个是中文翻译过来的吧，文中错误很多，有具体时间的用介词On，还有动词词性用错了，现在式和过去式不分，句子过于砸碎，哪来那么多主语。有的好几句可以合并成一句。还有教育经历要从最近的写到远的，这是是英语习惯。