请问这样的作文在雅思学术类考试中,可以拿几分.请用力拍砖.请点评.some people believe that those who are not talented in language learning should not be required to learn a foreign language.What is your opinion~Arguments arou

请问这样的作文在雅思学术类考试中,可以拿几分.请用力拍砖.请点评.some people believe that those who are not talented in language learning should not be required to learn a foreign language.What is your opinion~Arguments arou
请问这样的作文在雅思学术类考试中,可以拿几分.请用力拍砖.请点评.
some people believe that those who are not talented in language learning should not be required to learn a foreign language.What is your opinion~
Arguments around education never stop in recent years.One of the focus topics is whether students who are not good at language learning should study foreign language.However,it is a compulsory for Chinese students to learn English whereas some countries as Japan hardly make their students learn language.As a result,I have more thinking want to share.Reasons will be given as follow.
First and foremost,it goes without saying that people have their unique talent.It will be much easier for those people who make good use of their talent to be successful.Hence,the authorities should take measures to help students to take advantage of their merits,and to avoid the demerits simultaneously.Imagine if Messi who is a famous football player play basketball instead of football,could he be the top star in the field of basketball?The answer may be very clear,his height extremely restrict his ability in this area.
Moreover,not most people can overcome all the hard time during their life.In china,English just like a barrier for certain people,which cannot be crossed.I am firmly believed that their confidence is undoubtedly influenced by the failure of learning English.The failure also has an effect on other activities,which gradually make an individual lose himself.After failing in passing the CET-4,my classmate gave up his study,which can be the perfect instance for this case.
Last but not least,some people think that people can work hard to study all the subjects,the difference is just how well they achieve.In fact,they are right to some extent.Studying hard is always an effective way to learning things.The problem is it will take ages for doing that.It is a kind of wasting time.What we should do is allocate more time to do the right thing rather than waste time to do some unnecessary thing.For example,KAKA is good at soccer,chair Mao is an excellent politician.It is impossible for anyone to be successful in all walks of life.
To sum up,as far as I concern,different people vary in different talent.Only if they pay more attention to the right activities ensure them a brilliant future.

请问这样的作文在雅思学术类考试中,可以拿几分.请用力拍砖.请点评.some people believe that those who are not talented in language learning should not be required to learn a foreign language.What is your opinion~Arguments arou
先说缺点：开头没点名你是同意还是反对这个观点.一开始肯定要明确亮出自己的观点,老外一天看那么多文章,不喜欢绕
三个层次证明自己的观点的话也没有很强的逻辑性
但是句子写得还不错,都是长句.篇幅够了,结尾可以再多一句.
一般的话6吧.,.要知道雅思6.5很困难的.但是不会低,因为你字数在那,句子也是长句还不错,承接的连接词也用了.最低5-5.5吧.具体看给你改作文的老师了.