改错,只有十处错误：Half a year ago I went abroad for further study.I received a lot of presents.All wrapped in color paper.Among them were two presents which were really interested me.My sister bought me a book with color pictures about body

改错,只有十处错误：Half a year ago I went abroad for further study.I received a lot of presents.All wrapped in color paper.Among them were two presents which were really interested me.My sister bought me a book with color pictures about body
改错,只有十处错误：Half a year ago I went abroad for further study.
I received a lot of presents.All wrapped in color paper.Among them were two presents which were really interested me.My sister bought me a book with color pictures about body language and with words about customs of different countries in it.My brother gave me a note,which read,"My present has been put in your bedroom." When I hurried into my bedroom,I found a box in it.Opening the box,I got a pocket computer.I was very glad.I understood these two presents would help me use body language to communicate wih people and improve my English .　怎么改?为什么?

改错,只有十处错误：Half a year ago I went abroad for further study.I received a lot of presents.All wrapped in color paper.Among them were two presents which were really interested me.My sister bought me a book with color pictures about body
I received a lot of presents.All wrapped in color paper.Among they were two presents which i really interested in it.My sister bought me a book with color pictures about body language and words about customs of different countries ..My brother gave me a note,which read,"My present has been put in your bedroom." When I hurried into my bedroom,I found a box opening in it.I got a pocket computer.I was very glad.I understood these two presents would help me use body language to communicate with people and improve my English i自己慢慢找吧.我有改过,但有些不确定.

1 All are wrapped in color paper. 缺少谓语动词
2 which really interested me 。在这里interest是动词，所以不用谓语动词了。
3 custom。这个是不可数名词
4 putted 这是现在完成时，应该用被动语态
5 I found a box in 在这里it可以不用。
6these ...

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1 All are wrapped in color paper. 缺少谓语动词
2 which really interested me 。在这里interest是动词，所以不用谓语动词了。
3 custom。这个是不可数名词
4 putted 这是现在完成时，应该用被动语态
5 I found a box in 在这里it可以不用。
6these presents，在这里these和two冲突用了。
7 Open the box 这是祈使句，动词要用原型。
其他的我也找不到了。不好意思。

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I received a lot(s) of presents. All wrapped in color paper(s). Among them were two presents which I'm really interesting in. My sister bought me a book with colorful pictures about body language(...

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I received a lot(s) of presents. All wrapped in color paper(s). Among them were two presents which I'm really interesting in. My sister bought me a book with colorful pictures about body language(s) and with words about customs of different countries. My brother gave me a note, which said,"My present had been put in your bedroom." when i hurried into my bedroom, i found a box and I opened it. It was a pocket computer and I was very pleased with it. I understood these two presents would help me use body languages to communicate with other people and improve my English.
如果不知一个， 一般前面那个 lot 也要加S 的。 有需要加的我都用括号了。 还有一些读起来不是很对的我也帮你改成另外一些 ，但意思都一样。 像刚开始第二句， Among they were two presents which i really interested in it 是 QDM133 打的 如果改成这样的话读起来有点不顺。 应该是 I’m。 还有 color picures 我给你改成 colorful 比 那强一点。 还有open 那里也有些不对。 我也给你改了改~~
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