求人帮我修改英语作文My home-town is ZHUHAI,a small city with sunshine and beach,which attract many tourist every year.ZHUHAI is almost the southmost of China,so it is always warm and sunny,even if in winter.The reason of Zhuhai attract so m

求人帮我修改英语作文My home-town is ZHUHAI,a small city with sunshine and beach,which attract many tourist every year.ZHUHAI is almost the southmost of China,so it is always warm and sunny,even if in winter.The reason of Zhuhai attract so m
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My home-town is ZHUHAI,a small city with sunshine and beach,which attract many tourist every year.ZHUHAI is almost the southmost of China,so it is always warm and sunny,even if in winter.The reason of Zhuhai attract so many visitors every year is the beach.I will introduce some activity you can have fun in the beach.Of cause,you can swim in the blue clearly sea.You can find various kinds of shell and crabs in the water.In addition,if you feel tired after swim,you can lie on the beach chair,enjoying the sunshine and wind.Don worry about hunger,you can eat the most delicious sea food BBQ near the beach.If you want,you can even barbecue with your friends.For that,you are required to prepare the forks and food.I am sure you would like to have a travel to ZHUHAI after look through this paragraph.
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求人帮我修改英语作文My home-town is ZHUHAI,a small city with sunshine and beach,which attract many tourist every year.ZHUHAI is almost the southmost of China,so it is always warm and sunny,even if in winter.The reason of Zhuhai attract so m
My home-town is ZHUHAI,a small city with sunshine and beach,where attracts many tourists every year.ZHUHAI is almost to the southmost of China,so it's always warm and sunny,even in winter.The reason why Zhuhai attracts so many visitors every year is because of the beach.I will introduce some fun you can have on the beach.For example,you can swim in the clear blue sea and you can find various kinds of shells and crabs in the water.In addition,if you feel tired after swim,you can lie on the beach chair,enjoying the sunshine and wind.Don't worry about hunger,because you can eat the most delicious sea food BBQ near the beach with your friends or alone.For that,you need to prepare forksand food.I am sure you would like to have a trip to ZHUHAI after reading my intruduction.
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My home-town is ZHUHAI, a small city with sunshine and beach, which attracts many tourists every year. ZHUHAI is almost the southtip of China, so it is always warm and sunny, even if in winter. The re...

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My home-town is ZHUHAI, a small city with sunshine and beach, which attracts many tourists every year. ZHUHAI is almost the southtip of China, so it is always warm and sunny, even if in winter. The reason why Zhuhai attracts so many visitors every year is because of its beach. I would like to introduce some activities you can enjoy on the beach. Of course, you can swim in the clear blue sea. You can find various kinds of shells and crabs in the water. In addition, if you feel tired after a swim, you can lie on the beach chair, enjoying the sunshine and the breeze. Don't worry about your stomach, you can have the most delicious sea food BBQ near the beach. If you want, you can also barbecue with your friends. For that, you are required to prepare the cutleries and food. I am sure you will be seriously considering having a trip to ZHUHAI after reading this invitation.

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