高中英语作文评分2（请高中英语教师进）这也是即将要高三的一次模拟考,作文自己写好(无修改,一气呵成）但是没人评分,望各位老师评一下分并且写下您的观点和修改建议.谢谢. Young pe

高中英语作文评分2（请高中英语教师进）这也是即将要高三的一次模拟考,作文自己写好(无修改,一气呵成）但是没人评分,望各位老师评一下分并且写下您的观点和修改建议.谢谢. Young pe
高中英语作文评分2（请高中英语教师进）

这也是即将要高三的一次模拟考,作文自己写好(无修改,一气呵成）但是没人评分,望各位老师评一下分并且写下您的观点和修改建议.谢谢.

      Young people are often at a loss when it`s up to them to choose their way of life . As it is shown at the picture , a young man with a bag on his shoulder ,looks at the sign of the road ,knowing nowhere to go . There is no denying that we young men often lose our way of the life ,which will not lead us to success . So how can we do when it is up to us to choose our way of life ? here are some suggestions.

     To start with , It is us who parents expect to be sccussful ,we ought not to make them disappiont , thus it is of much significance to learn to be mature .Secondly , what we also do is learn some social skills which benefit us a lot . Moreover, we may learn something from our parents as well ,it is well known to us that parents are the guidance in our life . Lastly ,we are supposed to do what we want so that we will improve our other skill.

     Obviously, Were we to follow those advice ,we would be able to choose our way of life . Only in this way can we be awake at the important choice

高中英语作文评分2（请高中英语教师进）这也是即将要高三的一次模拟考,作文自己写好(无修改,一气呵成）但是没人评分,望各位老师评一下分并且写下您的观点和修改建议.谢谢. Young pe
高考英语作文评分标准
1 总分为25分,按5个档次给分.
2 评分时,先根据文章的内容和语言初步确定其所属档次,然后以该档次的要求来衡量,确定或调整档次,最后给分.
3 词数少于 80和多于 120的,从总分中减去2分.
4 评分时,应注意的主要内容为：内容要点、应用词汇和语法结构的数量和准确性、上下文的连贯性及语言的得体性.
5 拼写与标点符号是语言准确性的一个方面,评分时,应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑.英、美拼写汉词汇用法均可接受.
6 如书写较差,以至影响交际,将分数降低一个档次.
7 内容要点可用不同方式表达,对紧扣主题的适当发挥不予扣分.
先来说你的语法问题,正如图片所示as is shown in the picture,而不是at the picture;看着路标是looking而不是looks,后面的knowing之前应该加个and.首字母大写Here.第二段whose parents而不是who,让某人失望let sb down更地道一些.What we also should do is to learn.第二段第三行it is前面加个because...other skills.这算作一道提建议的作文,第一第二第三最后说法略显老套,要我打分就在及格边缘咯.