自己写的一段英文,请帮忙挑错,我是初学者.I am Haifeng, I was born in BeiJing,China,My family and I have been living (lived) here since I was born.Beijing is the capital of China,It's famous for a lot of places of interest (place of in

自己写的一段英文,请帮忙挑错,我是初学者.I am Haifeng, I was born in BeiJing,China,My family and I have been living (lived) here since I was born.Beijing is the capital of China,It's famous for a lot of places of interest (place of in
自己写的一段英文,请帮忙挑错,我是初学者.
I am Haifeng, I was born in BeiJing,China,My family and I have been living (lived) here since I was born.
Beijing is the capital of China,It's famous for a lot of places of interest (place of interest:名胜古迹).
Beijing had successfully held the Olympic game in 2008,so it has been know by all world.
Every year,There are thousands of people from abroad to visit Beijing.these peple bring a lot of money for the goverment, so we welcome the foreign friends to visit our city.

我叫海风,我出生在中国,北京,我的家人和我从我出生的时候就一直住在北京.
北京是中国的首都,它因为大量的名胜古迹而闻名.
北京在2008年成功举办了奥运会,于是全世界都知道了北京.
每一年,有成千上万的外国人来北京参观,这些人给政府带来很多收入,所以我们欢迎外国朋友参观我们的城市.

自己写的一段英文,请帮忙挑错,我是初学者.I am Haifeng, I was born in BeiJing,China,My family and I have been living (lived) here since I was born.Beijing is the capital of China,It's famous for a lot of places of interest (place of in
I am Hai Feng（或Feng Hai姓、名分开）,I was born in Beijing,China,My family and I have been living (如果现在还住在北京,用living) here since I was born.Beijing is the capital of China,It's famous for a lot of places of interest (place of interest:名胜古迹).Beijing had successfully held the 【Olympic Games复数】 in 2008,so it has been known by 【all the world全世界的人】.Every year,there are 【thousands应该用millions数以百万计的】 of people from abroad 【to visit用visiting】 Beijing.【these peple bring a lot of money for the goverment这句话不太妥当,they spend a lot of money in Beijing and contribute to the increase of government revenue他们在北京花了很多钱,也为政府的财政收入增长做出了贡献】,so we welcome 【不需要the,删除】 foreign friends to visit our city.

Haifeng，变为Haifeng.
我出生在北京是一个事实，可以直接 I am born in Beijing.
第一个BeiJing改为Beijing.
It's famous前面用句号，it为大写It.或者把it‘s 改成which is.
Olympic game改为Olympic Games.
has been know改为 has be...

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Haifeng，变为Haifeng.
我出生在北京是一个事实，可以直接 I am born in Beijing.
第一个BeiJing改为Beijing.
It's famous前面用句号，it为大写It.或者把it‘s 改成which is.
Olympic game改为Olympic Games.
has been know改为 has been known.
all world改为all the world.
Every day后面，去掉。There 改为there.
to visit改为 visiting.
these 为大写，These.
许多小错误，自己认真点，就克服了。

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没有啊，只是北京拼错了~