请雅思高手帮忙评价我的这篇雅思作文!Topic:We can get knowledge from news.But some people even think we should not trust the journalists.What do you think?And what do you think are the important qualities that a journalist should have?

请雅思高手帮忙评价我的这篇雅思作文!Topic:We can get knowledge from news.But some people even think we should not trust the journalists.What do you think?And what do you think are the important qualities that a journalist should have?
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Topic:We can get knowledge from news.But some people even think we should not trust the journalists.What do you think?And what do you think are the important qualities that a journalist should have?
In our contemporary society,information explosion has already been a notable feature.News,as a sort of media,which is released rapidly and briefly,has been concerntrated on.However,in the meantime,whether the news reported is true has sparked much debate.Some people believe that the news issued by reporters is not trustworthy.As far as I am concerned,we should trust the journalists and there are at least three aspects of qualities which are essential for most of them.
To begin with,an excellent reporter should be a knowledgable person in his field.When he comes across an incident,what he needs is make his decision whether or not it is worth reporting and how to report it.Actually there are some unqualified journalists making news untrue only because of their narrow knowledge which mislead people to wrong minds.This can probably cause bad influences in domestic society,or even in international society.Another point is that if a reporter own broad knowledge,the local people and authorities are willing to provide he with extra imformation which he may need.
Here comes to the second place,one of the basic obligations of a reporter is objective.This is a common moral of all journalists in every field.Nowadays,some enterprises or local governments or even central government bribe unresponsible journalists to release false news to public by luring either large sums of money or high reputations for their own interests.This phenomenon directly makes people from all over the global hate bitterly and may even cause conflicts between two countries.It can seem that a reporter with honesty and object is so important that he may even change the relationship among countries.
Lastly,for journalists,the first time is also indispensable.Due to the essence of news,newsmen need to behave rapidly to report what is going on.Not only do the news offices require,but the whole society as well.
In my point of view,reporters in modern society have been selected severly and delibreately.Most of them possess the qualities which we can absolutely believe.
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请雅思高手帮忙评价我的这篇雅思作文!Topic:We can get knowledge from news.But some people even think we should not trust the journalists.What do you think?And what do you think are the important qualities that a journalist should have?
When he comes across an incident,what he needs is (to) make his decision whether or not it is worth reporting and how to report it.
Here comes to the second place,one of the basic obligations of a reporter is objective.(这句写的不好,问题问的是QUALITY你这里写OBLIGATION是问具有什么品质而不是有什么义务,而且最后的OBJECTIVE前应该加个TO BE)
Lastly,for journalists,the first time is also indispensable.这句太CHINGLISH了,外国人根本看不懂,估计你的意思是要第一时间进行报道,改成THE ABILITY TO RESPOND to （反应能力）,然后后面写两三句进行解释.
这篇文章存在一些主谓不一致,字数是够的,分段也比较清晰,但感觉连词和大词用得还不够,我给分的话,大概6分,考官心情好6.5分也是有可能的.（PS：我总分8分）