麻烦帮我看一下有什么语法错误,大概还有什么地方需要改进.(是用于口语中!)My hometown is an inland city best known for rolling hills and the confluence of the Yangtze and Jialing Rivers.I suppose the first feature I would s

麻烦帮我看一下有什么语法错误,大概还有什么地方需要改进.(是用于口语中!)My hometown is an inland city best known for rolling hills and the confluence of the Yangtze and Jialing Rivers.I suppose the first feature I would s
麻烦帮我看一下有什么语法错误,大概还有什么地方需要改进.(是用于口语中!)
My hometown is an inland city best known for rolling hills and the confluence of the Yangtze and Jialing Rivers.I suppose the first feature I would say in my hometown is its gorgeous cityscape,especially the night scene.When I stant at the relatively high mountain,I always astonished from this view.Also,the light trails widly used in my hometown .I suppose it is a very convinent transpor tool and it can help people saved much time.Another siginificant characteristic is that the delicious food attacts a tons of tourists like the hot pot.Besides,I also believe the color in this kind of food may represents the local people of hot personality.

麻烦帮我看一下有什么语法错误,大概还有什么地方需要改进.(是用于口语中!)My hometown is an inland city best known for rolling hills and the confluence of the Yangtze and Jialing Rivers.I suppose the first feature I would s
1.best known for "the" rolling hills
2.I "believe" the first feature I will describe" in...(suppose represents a kind of uncertainty,not suitable for this situation)
3.when I "stand" (wrong spelling here) "on the hill and overlook the city",I "am" (should have a verb here) always astonished "by" the view.
4.also,light trails (no the) "are" widly used in my hometown .不知道你用light trail是指的什麼,似乎没有这种交通工具,改用tram/train比较好.
5.i believe/think (not suppose) it is a very convenient (wrong spelling here) "transportation" and it can help people save (should use bare infinite here after "can") much time.
6.Another siginificant characteristic "of the city" is the delicious food which attracts (change the pattern of the sentence,but the original sentence has nothing wrong)...
7....I also believe the style (not color) of (not in) this kind of food may represents the local people of hot personality.
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My hometown is an inland city best known for rolling hills and the confluence of the Yangtze and Jialing Rivers. I suppose the first feature I would say in my hometown is its gorgeous cityscape, espec...

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My hometown is an inland city best known for rolling hills and the confluence of the Yangtze and Jialing Rivers. I suppose the first feature I would say in my hometown is its gorgeous cityscape, especially the night scene. When I stant at the relatively high mountain, I WAS always astonished from this view. Also, the light trails(do you mean light rails) are widly used in my hometown . I suppose(believe) it is a very convinent transport tool and it can help people SAVE much time. Another siginificant characteristic is the delicious food SUCH AS HOT POT WHICCH attacts TONS of tourists. Besides, I also believe the color in this kind of food may represent the local people's hot personality.

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很多字都不是口语的！

1. best known for "the" rolling hills
2. I "believe" the first feature I will describe" in...(suppose represents a kind of uncertainty,not suitable for this situation)
3. when I "stand" (wrong...

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1. best known for "the" rolling hills
2. I "believe" the first feature I will describe" in...(suppose represents a kind of uncertainty,not suitable for this situation)
3. when I "stand" (wrong spelling here) "on the hill and overlook the city", I "am" (should have a verb here) always astonished "by" the view.
4. also, light trails (no the) "are" widly used in my hometown . 不知道你用light trail是指的什麼,似乎没有这种交通工具,改用tram/train比较好。
5. i believe/think (not suppose) it is a very convenient (wrong spelling here) "transportation" and it can help people save (should use bare infinite here after "can") much time.
6. Another siginificant characteristic "of the city" is the delicious food which attracts (change the pattern of the sentence, but the original sentence has nothing wrong)...
7. ... I also believe the style (not color) of (not in) this kind of food may represents the local people of hot personality.
仅供参考,自己衡量衡量要不要全部或部分采用。

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