哥哥姐姐们帮我看看我的英语作文有没有错的地方~初一咋要写这么烦的题目呢~麻烦各位哥哥姐姐帮我看看有没有语法错误,那些什么文笔什么的都不管就行了,就看看单词对不对和语文有没有

哥哥姐姐们帮我看看我的英语作文有没有错的地方~初一咋要写这么烦的题目呢~麻烦各位哥哥姐姐帮我看看有没有语法错误,那些什么文笔什么的都不管就行了,就看看单词对不对和语文有没有
哥哥姐姐们帮我看看我的英语作文有没有错的地方~
初一咋要写这么烦的题目呢~麻烦各位哥哥姐姐帮我看看有没有语法错误,那些什么文笔什么的都不管就行了,就看看单词对不对和语文有没有问题就OK了.
There were many traffic accidents in Guangzhou.Some drivers like eating food or making telephone calls when they are driving cars.That's so dangrous!And some drivers will feel sleeply an tired when they're driving cars.It's very dangrous too.So when you feel tired,don't drive your cars.Someone will drink beer before they drive a car or driving a car.And someone will talk with others.That's also very dangrous.So,all the drivers,please be carefull when you are driving a car.

哥哥姐姐们帮我看看我的英语作文有没有错的地方~初一咋要写这么烦的题目呢~麻烦各位哥哥姐姐帮我看看有没有语法错误,那些什么文笔什么的都不管就行了,就看看单词对不对和语文有没有
There are many traffic accidents in Guangzhou every year.Some drivers like eating food or making telephone calls when they are driving cars.That's so dangrous!And some drivers will feel sleeply and tired when they're driving cars.It's very dangrous,too.So when you feel tired,don't drive your cars.Someone will drink beer before they drive cars or driving cars.If someone talks with others,it will be also very dangrous.So,all the drivers,please be careful when you are driving cars.

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Many traffic accidents are happening in Guangzhou.Some drivers like to eat food or making telephone calls when they are driving their cars.That's so dangrous! Some drivers will feel sleeply and tired ...

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Many traffic accidents are happening in Guangzhou.Some drivers like to eat food or making telephone calls when they are driving their cars.That's so dangrous! Some drivers will feel sleeply and tired when they're driving cars.It's very dangrous too.So when you feel tired,don't drive your cars.Someone will drink beer before they drive a car and sometimes they will talk with others.That's also very dangrous.So,all the drivers,please be carefull when you are driving a car.
and 不能作为句子的开始。
你看看有些地方改了

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were->are
so->very
an->and
will drink->drinks
删除or driving a car
will talk->talks

第二行的 that改成it
第三行的 an 改成and
第五行的 or driving a car 去掉
其他的 OK

drivers likes
that's too dangerous sleepy
beer最好改成wine be careful

sleeply an tired 改为sleeply and tired
个人认为词用重复了
So when you feel tired,don't drive your car.Someone
一般来说一个人有一辆车
please be careful when you are 不是双写 l

There are many traffic accidents in Guangzhou.Some drivers like eating food or making telephone calls when they are driving cars.And some even drive when they're sleeply and tired .It's very dangrous ...

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There are many traffic accidents in Guangzhou.Some drivers like eating food or making telephone calls when they are driving cars.And some even drive when they're sleeply and tired .It's very dangrous .So when you feel tired,don't drive your cars.Someone will drink beer before they drive a car or driving a car.And someone will talk with others.That's also very dangrous.So,all the drivers,please be carefull when you are driving a car.

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