请英语高手帮忙看看我自己写的句子有无语病（急用,I plan by plan(UA880）from PEK to LAX at Jul12 2009.then by Greyhound bus or warking to travel to famous Grand Canyou,Yellow Stone and Yosemite National Park and LA,LV,Sanfancisco

请英语高手帮忙看看我自己写的句子有无语病（急用,I plan by plan(UA880）from PEK to LAX at Jul12 2009.then by Greyhound bus or warking to travel to famous Grand Canyou,Yellow Stone and Yosemite National Park and LA,LV,Sanfancisco
请英语高手帮忙看看我自己写的句子有无语病（急用,
I plan by plan(UA880）from PEK to LAX at Jul12 2009.then by Greyhound bus or warking to travel to famous Grand Canyou,Yellow Stone and Yosemite National Park and LA,LV,Sanfancisco,San Diego,Solvang,Hearst Castle,UnionCity,Monterey Bay,Seattle,New York,Houston and so on in my summer holiday of 2009.I want to spend 30-40 days in this.and stay in Hilton Hotel or Hostelworld and Buffet room.the last I plan going home at Aug 24 2009 by UA851.

请英语高手帮忙看看我自己写的句子有无语病（急用,I plan by plan(UA880）from PEK to LAX at Jul12 2009.then by Greyhound bus or warking to travel to famous Grand Canyou,Yellow Stone and Yosemite National Park and LA,LV,Sanfancisco
I shall fly by UA880 from PEK to LAX on July 12,2009.Once landed,I shall take greyhound bus (note:NO SUCH WORD "WARKING") to Grand Canyon,Yellow Stone and Yosemite National Park.For the rest of my 2009 summer holiday,I shall travel to the cities of LA,LV,San Francisco,San Diego,Solvang,Hearst Castle,Union city,Monterey Bay,Seattle,New York and Houston.This may need 30-40 days in this summer.For accommodation,I shall stay in Hilton Hotel,Hostel World and Buffet room.By August 24,2009,I shall return home by flight number UA851.

I shall fly by UA880 from PEK to LAX on July 12, 2009. Once landed, I shall take greyhound bus (note: NO SUCH WORD "WARKING") to Grand Canyon, Yellow Stone and Yosemite National Park. For the rest of ...

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I shall fly by UA880 from PEK to LAX on July 12, 2009. Once landed, I shall take greyhound bus (note: NO SUCH WORD "WARKING") to Grand Canyon, Yellow Stone and Yosemite National Park. For the rest of my 2009 summer holiday, I shall travel to the cities of LA, LV, San Francisco, San Diego, Solvang, Hearst Castle, Union city, Monterey Bay, Seattle, New York and Houston. This may need 30-40 days in this summer. For accommodation, I shall stay in Hilton Hotel, Hostel World and Buffet room. By August 24, 2009, I shall return home by flight number UA851. 这样差不多就可以了！！！！！！

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I'll plan to fly by UA880 from PEK to LAX on July 12, 2009. After that, I'll take a greyhound bus or walk to Grand Canyon, Yellow Stone and Yosemite National Park. For the rest of my 2009 summer holid...

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I'll plan to fly by UA880 from PEK to LAX on July 12, 2009. After that, I'll take a greyhound bus or walk to Grand Canyon, Yellow Stone and Yosemite National Park. For the rest of my 2009 summer holidays, I'll travel to the cities such as LA, LV, San Francisco, San Diego, Solvang, Hearst Castle, Union city, Monterey Bay, Seattle, New York, Houston,etc. The tour may need 30-40 days in this summer. As for accommodation, I'll stay in Hilton Hotel, Hostel World or Buffet room. I'll plan to return by flight number UA851 on August 24, 2009.

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第一句plan后要加to句号后要大写，in my summer holiday中in改为on