美化文章(英文)Fourth, the bar chart indicates that different family backgrounds lead to juvenile delinquency. It can be see from the bar chart, 30 students think family of low in come will lead to juvenile delinquency, which is 10 times of thos

美化文章(英文)Fourth, the bar chart indicates that different family backgrounds lead to juvenile delinquency. It can be see from the bar chart, 30 students think family of low in come will lead to juvenile delinquency, which is 10 times of thos
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Fourth, the bar chart indicates that different family backgrounds lead to juvenile delinquency. It can be see from the bar chart, 30 students think family of low in come will lead to juvenile delinquency, which is 10 times of those who think family of high in come will lead to juvenile delinquency. And also 7 students think middle class family will lead to juvenile delinquency.
Sixth, according to the pie chart, we know that 42% students think government is doing enough to cut down juvenile delinquency. In contrast, only 3% students think the policy of government is useless. However, 35% students think government’s policy is not enough and 20% students think government is great to cut down juvenile delinquency. 11 students consider education should be improved, because young people should reinforce the concept of crime. 10 students think government should provide more useful programs, such as sports, music, and 9 students think government should strength law of young people, in order to tell them how serious juvenile delinquency is. Moreover, others think family is very important for young people, because parents are best teacher for their children.
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美化文章(英文)Fourth, the bar chart indicates that different family backgrounds lead to juvenile delinquency. It can be see from the bar chart, 30 students think family of low in come will lead to juvenile delinquency, which is 10 times of thos
Fourth,the bar graph shows the correlation between family backgrounds and juvenile delinquency.As it appears on the bar graph,30 students think that children who grew up in a low income families are more likely to lead to juvenile delinquency,which is ten times more comparing to those who think that children who grew up in high income families will lead to juvenile delinquency.And the rest of the 7 student believe that middle class family can result in juvenile delinquency.
Sixth,according to the pie chart,we see that 42% of the students who participated in the survey perceive the government has done enough to cut down cases of juvenile delinquency which is contrast to 3% who believe the government's policy to be useless.The other 35% of the students think government's policy is not enough comparing to 20% who believe the policy is great and effective in cutting down those cases.Of the people who participated,11 students think that education can be improved to reduce juvenile delinquency by reinforce concepts of crimes;; 10 students believe that government should provide more effective programs,such as sports,music,etc.; 9 students think government should strengthen juvenile law in order to deter them from committing crimes; the rest of the students consider family to be very influential,because parents are the best teachers for their children.

Fourth, the bar chart indicates that different family backgrounds lead to (different levels of????)juvenile delinquency. It can be see from the bar chart, 30 students think family of low in come(incom...

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Fourth, the bar chart indicates that different family backgrounds lead to (different levels of????)juvenile delinquency. It can be see from the bar chart, 30 students think family of low in come(income, no space in between) will lead to juvenile delinquency, which is 10 times of those who think family of high in come(income) will lead to juvenile delinquency. And also 7 students think middle class family will lead to juvenile delinquency.
Sixth(where is the fifth????), according to the pie chart, we know that 42% students think government is doing enough to cut down juvenile delinquency. In contrast, only 3% students think the policy of government is useless. However, 35% students think government’s policy is not enough and 20% students think government is great to cut down juvenile delinquency. (this whole sentence: however, 2o% of the students think government is great to cut down juvenile delinquency, while there is(not "are" i think) still 35% of the students think government's policy is not good enough.)11 students consider education should be improved, because young people should reinforce the concept of crime (so they can prevent it). 10 students think government should provide more useful programs, such as sports, music,(so that...explain with more details..?)(change","to";") and 9 students think government should strength (strengthen?) law (the laws)of young people(you might try the word "teenagers"), in order to tell them how serious juvenile delinquency is. Moreover, others (you should say "most of them" to emphasize your point) think family is very important for young people, because parents are best teacher for their children.
所有改了的都写在括号里,你好看见改哪了. 有的地方你用的不太合适, 但是我也不知道怎么写读着舒服就写了个建议和问号.

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Fourth, the bar graph shows the correlation between family backgrounds and juvenile delinquency. As it appears on the bar graph, 30 students think that children who grew up in a low income families ar...

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Fourth, the bar graph shows the correlation between family backgrounds and juvenile delinquency. As it appears on the bar graph, 30 students think that children who grew up in a low income families are more likely to lead to juvenile delinquency, which is ten times more comparing to those who think that children who grew up in high income families will lead to juvenile delinquency. And the rest of the 7 student believe that middle class family can result in juvenile delinquency.
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