下面是我写的英语论文,题目是Does God exist?Yes/No,and why?希望给意见还有修改一下～No matter today or during the ancient time,the existence of God is always a popular topic for people to argue about.Some said God does exist,and

下面是我写的英语论文,题目是Does God exist?Yes/No,and why?希望给意见还有修改一下～No matter today or during the ancient time,the existence of God is always a popular topic for people to argue about.Some said God does exist,and
下面是我写的英语论文,题目是Does God exist?Yes/No,and why?希望给意见还有修改一下～
No matter today or during the ancient time,the existence of God is always a popular topic for people to argue about.Some said God does exist,and some said no,God never exist.Most of people who said God exists are Christian.Well,I am not a Christian.But what I want to say at here is,God does exist.However,my opinion is,there must be one powerful and unknowable ruler behind us but it doesn't mean this ruler will be the one who called God by human and Christian.It can be a spirit,a abstract creature,or something what we can't imagine at all!There are my points below.
At first,it is impossible that there is nobody created all the things in universe.As our teaching taught us,every thing must have a cause and an effect.there must be a cause to explain the existence of this world and universe.What's more,the most reasonable answer should is,there is a ruler over the universe.Therefore,the disagreement of the existence of God must be wrong.
Moreover,there are many things what can't known by human forever.Assuming we are the highest rulers of the universe.If so,why can't we solve all those mysteries?Why can't we know and explain all the things happened in this world?in today's world,many scientists began to convert to Christianity.it is because when they were trying to find truth,they finally found there should a ruler who will not be a human.there is a saying,the more you are closer to truth,the more things you do not know.Accordingly,we are not highest rulers.There is a ruler who know and created everything.the agreement of the existence of God directly refer to the agreement of human powerless.Actually,we are powerless.
Also,we always see some photos which pictured ghosts on them.Many people think those photo are made in photo shop and they are not real.But I don't think so.Maybe there is ghost and Satan like what bible said.We don't want to agree with these ideas because we don't want to recognized those things we cannot see or touch.But some of them are actually exist.Those things we can't touch and see and smell are not absolutely imagination.They may exist just as God should be exist.
Lastly,I want to restate my position.I believe there is a existence of one like the existence of God.but this ruler may or may not be "God".He may not be like what people describe about God.However,there is a holy and highest ruler.This is the truth.I believe that one day the truth will be known by people all over the world.Even if we can never solve all the mysteries of the enormous universe,we can recognize the existence of God and our inability of exploring all the universe which can lead us one more step closer to the truth.
这是我的整篇论文,不用改得很深奥,这篇论文重要的是有creative thought,就是要很creativity,还有如果文章有语法问题的话还是帮我改以下吧.我写的不好哈.
第二段第一行错了，是teacher不是teaching，第二段第三行是should be，对不起字打错的太多了。凑和看吧

下面是我写的英语论文,题目是Does God exist?Yes/No,and why?希望给意见还有修改一下～No matter today or during the ancient time,the existence of God is always a popular topic for people to argue about.Some said God does exist,and
The existence of God has been a controversial tropic for thousand years.Some say God does exist,and some say no,God never exists.Most of people who say God exists are Christian.Well,I am not a Christian.But what I want to say is,God does exist.However,my opinion is,there must be one powerful and unknowable ruler behind us but it doesn't mean this ruler should be the one who called God by humans and Christian.It can be a spirit,a abstract creature,or something what we can't imagine at all!My arguements are as fallows:.
First of all,There must be someone who created all the things in universe.As our teachers taught us,every thing have a cause and an effect,there must be a reason to explain the existence of this world and universe.What's more,the most reasonable answer should be,there is a ruler over the universe.Therefore,the disagreement of the existence of God must be wrong.
Moreover,there are many things that can't be known by human forever.Assuming we are the highest rulers of the universe.If so,why can't we solve all the mysteries?Why can't we know and explain all the things happened in this world?Nowadays,many scientists turn to believe Christianism.it is because when they were trying to look for a truth,they finally find there should a ruler who is not a human.As the old saying goes,the more you are closer to truth,the more things you do not know.Similarly,we are not the highest rulers.There is a ruler who know and creat everything.The agreement of the existence of God directly refers to the agreement of human's powerless.Actually,we are powerless.
Also,we always see ghosts in some photos.Many people think those photos have been disposaled by photoshop and they are unreal.But I don't think so.Maybe there are ghost and Satan like what bible depicts.We are unwilled to agree with these ideas because we don't want to admit those things we cannot see or touch.But some of them are actually exist.Those things we can't touch and see and smell are not absolute imagination.They may exist just as God should be exist.
Lastly,I want to restate my position.I believe there is someone who exists like God.but this ruler is not necessary to be "God".However,there is a holy and highest ruler.This is true.I believe that one day the truth will be known by people all over the world.Even if we can never solve all the mysteries of the enormous universe,we can recognize the existence of God and our inability of exploring all the universe which can lead us one step closer to the truth.
我不对你文章中唯心主义及不可知论的观点作任何评价,但就英语这方面给出我的一些看法,不当之处请谅解.
首先这遍文章太中文化,我估计很多是直接翻译过来的吧,一些用几个单词可以说清的句子你绕了几个弯.
其次是时态混乱,没有分清过去时及现在时的用法.
再次是使用的词汇太简单,很多可以表否定意义的词汇是可以使用的,但你却非要用助动词加not.
最后很多情态动词使用不合适,很多地方使用must太过绝对,而另一些你的论点的地方情态动词用使用显得语气太弱.
我改了几十处吧,但没作太大变动,请你对照你的原文看看,不当之处还请原谅.

No matter today or in the past, the existence of God is always a popular topic for people to argue about. Some insist that God does exist,(用一般现在时态好点，因为无论过去现在人们都持有此种观点，下同理） and some just say no, God n...

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No matter today or in the past, the existence of God is always a popular topic for people to argue about. Some insist that God does exist,(用一般现在时态好点，因为无论过去现在人们都持有此种观点，下同理） and some just say no, God never exists. Most of people who think God exists are Christian. Well, I am not a Christian. But what I want to say here is, God does exist. However, my opinion is, there must be one powerful and unknowable ruler behind us but it doesn't mean this ruler will be the one who is(注意被动语态） called God by Christian. It can be a kind of（精神不可数名次，必须如此表达） spirit, a abstract creature, or something what we can't describe at all! There are my points below.
At first, it is impossible that there is nobody creating（主动形式） all the things in universe. As our teachers taught us, every thing must have a cause and an effect. there must be reasons to explain the existence of this world and universe. What's more, the most reasonable answer should be（原型）, there is a ruler over the universe. Therefore, the disagreement of the existence of God must be wrong.
Moreover, there are many things that human can not understands clearly . Assuming we are the highest rulers of the universe. If so, why can't we solve all those mysteries? Why can't we know and explain all the things happened in this world? in the present, many scientists begin to convert to Christianity. it is because when they were trying to find truth, they will find there should a ruler who is a human. there is such a saying, the more you are closer to truth, the more things you do not know. Accordingly, we are not highest rulers. There is a ruler who knows and creates everything. the agreement of the existence of God directly refers to the agreement of human's powerlessness. Actually, we are powerless.
Also, we always see some photos which pictured ghosts on them. Many people think those photos are processed in photoshop and they are not real. But I don't think so. Maybe there is ghost and Satan like what is said in the bible. We don't want to agree with these ideas because we don't want to recognize those things we cannot see or touch. But some of them do actually exist. Those things we can't touch and see and smell are not absolutely false. They may exist just like the existence of God.
Lastly, I want to restate my opinion. I believe there is a existence of one like the existence of God. （此句要表达什么意思啊？）but this ruler may or may not be "God". He may not be like what people describe about God. However, there is a holy and highest ruler. This is the truth. I believe that one day the truth will be known by people all over the world. Even if we can never solve all the mysteries of the enormous universe, we can recognize the existence of God and our inability of exploring all the universe which can lead us one more step closer to the truth.
主要的问题是语法问题：1、时态没用好，2 、有中式英文的用法，不够地道！！

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heat warning today in the yellow finish our last game. Because junior high school students gathered before and late to the stadium. But no play has picked up 10:4, OMG I play is not great haha the mea...

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heat warning today in the yellow finish our last game. Because junior high school students gathered before and late to the stadium. But no play has picked up 10:4, OMG I play is not great haha the meaning of security as we fully intend to carry out the tactics. Finally,plusdresses.com, I still hand over the audience down 4 points 3 rebounds results. Top how to play every game so smooth 3 ball down the field all the data! Alas, no breakthrough is really boring ah

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累人的事他们都帮你干了 我来帮你拿分吧，这样你的投票别人就看不到结果，不然你的论文到网上一艘 就被人发现了 对你不好 哈哈

askme163和川农又一受害者改了英文，我谈谈creative thought的问题。
你的论点大致是这样的（我的意见写在中括号里）：
1. 申明God指哲学上的最高存在或绝对精神，并非神学上的。
2. 世界是因果性的，必有终极因[很传统的想法，只要持之有故即可，As our teachers taught us不妨删去]。
3. 宇宙必有主宰者[从逻辑上说，Wh...

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askme163和川农又一受害者改了英文，我谈谈creative thought的问题。
你的论点大致是这样的（我的意见写在中括号里）：
1. 申明God指哲学上的最高存在或绝对精神，并非神学上的。
2. 世界是因果性的，必有终极因[很传统的想法，只要持之有故即可，As our teachers taught us不妨删去]。
3. 宇宙必有主宰者[从逻辑上说，What's more……God must be wrong.最好挪到下一段]，主宰者必须能够彻底祛魅[全能的必要条件是全知，这需要说明]，所以人不是主宰者[many scientists begin to convert to Christianity，历史上准确地说，用begin是不妥当的]。
4. 鬼魂是真实的实在，所以作为其对立面，God也存在[如果能断言鬼魂的存在，其实也可以直接断言God的存在，你觉得呢？]。
5. 以上属性保证了God的神圣性，以及与truth的等同[需要继续论证God与truth的关系]。
一篇小作业本来就处理不了那么大的问题，写成这样已经很不错了；最好还是以语言的流畅为重，把语法问题修理一下；思路的顺畅应当体现于观点的逻辑接续中，而你用的What's more、Moreover和Also就像一堆“还有…还有”一样，有点八股。

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