我这里有一篇英语自我介绍,请哥哥姐姐们帮我修改一下,Hello,eneryone!It's a great pleasure for me to introduce myself to you here.Do you know Holly Wood?A district of Los Anqeks in America .Yeah,That's my English name .A spicial n

我这里有一篇英语自我介绍,请哥哥姐姐们帮我修改一下,Hello,eneryone!It's a great pleasure for me to introduce myself to you here.Do you know Holly Wood?A district of Los Anqeks in America .Yeah,That's my English name .A spicial n
我这里有一篇英语自我介绍,请哥哥姐姐们帮我修改一下,
Hello,eneryone!It's a great pleasure for me to introduce myself to you here.Do you know Holly Wood?A district of Los Anqeks in America .Yeah,That's my English name .A spicial name.Please remember me.
Now,let me tell you something about myself.My name is Wang Hong.I am a student of No,8 Middle School.I am in Class 4,Grade 1.About all the subjects,I like English best.I began to learn English when I was 8 years old,I listen to the English tapy half an hour every day.I enjoy learning English,and I want to be an interpreter in the future.That is my dream.I have lots of interest,such as swimming,singing,playing computer games and so on.My slogan is:Well begun is half done!I believe I am the best!I hope I can make a good perfermance.I am confident that I can succeed.Remember me:Holly Wood,the special girl.
Thank you.

我这里有一篇英语自我介绍,请哥哥姐姐们帮我修改一下,Hello,eneryone!It's a great pleasure for me to introduce myself to you here.Do you know Holly Wood?A district of Los Anqeks in America .Yeah,That's my English name .A spicial n
Hello,eneryone!It's a great pleasure for me to introduce myself to you here.Do you know Holly Wood?A district of Los Anqeks in America .Yeah,That's my English name .A spicial name,yes?
Now,let me tell you something about true myself.My name is Wang Hong.I am from No,8 Middle School,in Class 4,Grade 1.
I am a good student.Among all the subjects,I like English best.I began to learn English when I was 8 years old.I was hard that I listen to the English tapy half an hour every day.I enjoy learning English,and My dream is to be an interpreter in the future.
I have lots of hobbies,such as swimming,singing,playing computer games and so on.
My slogan is:Well begun is half done!I believe I am the best!I hope I can make a good perfermance.I believe that I can succeed because I am cofident.
Remember me:Holly Wood,the special girl.
Thank you very much.
小妹妹,你的语法基本没有问题.在自我介绍中一定要注意用词的精练和逻辑性.你看看这样改以后是不是有条有序了许多?
我祝福你哦~

Hello,eneryone! It's a great pleasure for me to introduce myself to you here.
Do you know HollyWood? A place where many famouse movies were produced there.Yeah, That's my English name .Quite spic...

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Hello,eneryone! It's a great pleasure for me to introduce myself to you here.
Do you know HollyWood? A place where many famouse movies were produced there.Yeah, That's my English name .Quite spicial. but you can remember me easily.
Now,let me tell you something about myself.
My Chinese name is Wang Hong.I am a student of No,8 Middle School.I am in Class 4,Grade 1.
Among all the subjects, I like English best.
I began to learn English when I was 8 years old.
I listen to the English tapy half an hour every day.
I enjoy learning English,and I want to be an interpreter in the future.
That is my dream.
Besides this,I also have lots of other interests,such as swimming,singing,playing computer games and so on.
My slogan is:Well begun is half done!I believe I am the best!
I hope I can make a good performance.
I am confident that I can succeed.
Remember me:Holly Wood,the special girl.
Thank you.
简单改了一下。另外，LA的全称以及 performance 的拼写有笔误。
你是初一学生？很不错了。

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