英语测试的作文写得很糟糕,请高手帮忙批改下,多谢了!题目是：假如你叫Mei Mei,在英语学习网站上看见一个帖子,一个叫Susan的美国学生,平时学习非常刻苦勤奋,但是,上次考试却没有得到高分,

英语测试的作文写得很糟糕,请高手帮忙批改下,多谢了!题目是：假如你叫Mei Mei,在英语学习网站上看见一个帖子,一个叫Susan的美国学生,平时学习非常刻苦勤奋,但是,上次考试却没有得到高分,
英语测试的作文写得很糟糕,请高手帮忙批改下,多谢了!
题目是：假如你叫Mei Mei,在英语学习网站上看见一个帖子,一个叫Susan的美国学生,平时学习非常刻苦勤奋,但是,上次考试却没有得到高分,心情很糟糕.请根据下面表格内容的提示,给她写一封回帖.
引出话题说明此类情况普遍存在.
对待分数的态度想得到高分很正常.
学习的目的主要是…….
……
提出建议1、放松心态.2、……
要求：1）表达清楚,语法正确,上下文连贯；
2）必须包括所有相关信息,并作适当发挥；
Dear Susan,
As we all know, many students like you care a lot about their grades in exams. They also want to get high marks, But you should the goal of studying is improve our knowledge.
The aim of exams is letting us know how much we know, why we lost the points…… then, we should improve us .Asking other students the problems that we don’t understand . Be hard-working and try our best to get higher marks in the next exam.
My advice is that You should be relaxed before exams, don’t be worried too much ,try your best and it just like a test.
May good luck will be always with you .
Loves from
HamMei

英语测试的作文写得很糟糕,请高手帮忙批改下,多谢了!题目是：假如你叫Mei Mei,在英语学习网站上看见一个帖子,一个叫Susan的美国学生,平时学习非常刻苦勤奋,但是,上次考试却没有得到高分,
Dear Susan,
As we all know, many students like you care a lot about their grades in exams. They also want to get high marks, But you should 【know】the goal of studying is improve our knowledge.
The aim of exams is letting us know how much we know, why we lost the points…… then, we should improve us .Asking other students the problems that we don’t understand . Be hard-working and try our best to get higher marks in the next exam.
My advice is that You should be relaxed before exams, don’t be worried too much ,try your best and it just like a test.
May good luck will be always with you .
Loves from
HamMei

嗯……我不是高手我是透明.
作文的话,一是卷面二是功底,这篇作文写得还是挺好的,有多用比较高级的结构.但是我没有看见什么更高级的单词以及短语、固定结构之类,乍眼看上去很普通.
所以亲在造句的时候不要惯性思维,多想一会儿,找新鲜的替代——要保证是对的,语法错误扣分多.
再者就是,英语作文一般是三段,第一段现象第二段普遍采取的方式第三段自己的意见,虽然不是通用,但大概就是这样的结构.段落多了不整齐,少了又太拥挤,三段刚刚好.还有亲的字数少了些.字体同样很重要,不知道亲的卷面怎样,卷面很拉分哦~
再者就是亲要扣紧题——
【引出话题说明此类情况普遍存在.
对待分数的态度想得到高分很正常.
学习的目的主要是…….
……
提出建议1、放松心态.2、……】
这是回一封安慰劝导的帖子,用和蔼的而不是陈述的语气我想比较好.
【羞涩捂脸】不知道说了什么……o(╯□╰)o