拜托哪位大哥大姐帮我完成一下英文自我介绍吧～Hello,It's a pleasure to meet you all.I'm very happy that I'm qualified for this interview.My name is kerry,I'm 20 years old,I am graduate from shanghai donghui vocational and technica

拜托哪位大哥大姐帮我完成一下英文自我介绍吧～Hello,It's a pleasure to meet you all.I'm very happy that I'm qualified for this interview.My name is kerry,I'm 20 years old,I am graduate from shanghai donghui vocational and technica
拜托哪位大哥大姐帮我完成一下英文自我介绍吧～
Hello,It's a pleasure to meet you all.I'm very happy that I'm qualified for this interview.My name is kerry,I'm 20 years old,I am graduate from shanghai donghui vocational and technical school and major in international commerce.Is reading the technical college,studies is the business management specialty.I once worked in the transport agent company as the merchandiser.I am hospitable and optimistic,adaptive capacity is strong,it is serious to work .my hobby is at writting,reading,singing and traveling.
I am very interested in this position,which can provide me more chance and challenge.Finally,thanks all of you for giving this chance for stating my wishes.I do wish that I can become a qualified staff in the position I applied for.Thank you very much.
这是我自己写的,请大家帮我把有错误的地方改一下并加以完善,最好附上中文对照,感激不敬,

拜托哪位大哥大姐帮我完成一下英文自我介绍吧～Hello,It's a pleasure to meet you all.I'm very happy that I'm qualified for this interview.My name is kerry,I'm 20 years old,I am graduate from shanghai donghui vocational and technica
It's a pleasure to meet you all --> It's my pleasure
I'm qualified for this interview.Qualified 不是这样用的
(A qualified doctor)
简单的一句 I'am grateful(表示感谢) to be chosen for this interview 就可以了
I am graduate from shanghai donghui vocational and technical school.Graduate 已是动词.--> I graduated from...(最好加上年份,如last year,in 2006等)
major--> majored 表示过去式
"Is reading the technical college,studies is the business management specialty?" 不明白...我猜你是想说
--> I specialized in business management.我专攻商业管理
I once worked in the transport agent company as the merchandiser.Once 可以省略,我反而认为如能说出这职业为你带来了什么好处会重要些,即你在处事方面有何改善,学懂了什么技能,知识,沟通技巧,这些会对你要应徵的这份工作有什么好处,而令主持面试者觉得你有能力胜任这工作
--> Having worked in a transportation agency,(用a,因之前没有提过是哪一公司,用agency,已代表了这机抅,用transportation,因我看到外国的都是这么叫) I have learnt to cooperate with (合作) one another,I have improved my communication skills which will help me work efficiently.(有效率地)
adaptive capacity is strong --> my adaptive capacity is high
"it is serious to work?" 不明白...还是你是想说这对工作很重要?
--> These qualities (素质) are very important.
my hobby is at writting,reading,singing and traveling.--> My hobbies are writing,reading,singing and traveling.
或地道些 --> Writing,reading,singing and traveling are my favorites (所爱好的).I enjoy them very much.
I am very interested in this position 这句感觉怪怪的...英文来说只是表现出你对这工作感兴趣
--> I really would like to be a/an___(工作名称),which can certainly(肯定) provide me with more chances and challenges (chances 和 challenges 都是可以数的,而整句都能让人感到你的热诚)
thanks all of you for giving this chance for stating my wishes (这句只是犯了文法上的错误)
--> Thanks to all of you for giving me this chance to state my wishes.(this chance to deliver my speech 可能会好些)
或--> Thank you all for...
I do wish that I can become a qualified staff in the position I applied for.Qualified 后面通常会用doctor,teacher这些专业,很少用staff这泛称
--> I do hope(hope较wish来得实际) that I can become a qualified___(一种专业) in the future.Should I be fortunate enough to be chosen for this position,(意指如果我能庆幸地被你们选中任这职位)I will fully(完全地) apply my skills in my work and get the job well done.(做好这份工)

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Hello, It's my pleasure to meet you all.I'm very happy that I'm qualified for this interview.My name is kerry,I'm 20 years old,I graduate from shanghai donghui vocational and technical school majoring in international commerce.I studied in the technical college, majoring the business management specialty.I once worked in the transport agent company as the merchandiser.I am hospitable and optimistic, adaptive capacity is strong, I am serious to work .my hobby is writting,reading,singing and traveling.
I am very interested in this position, which can provide me more chance and challenge. Finally, thanks for giving me the chance to state my wishes. I do wish that I can become a qualified staff in your company I applied for.Thank you very much.

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