帮我修改一篇英语自我介绍Good afternoon ,teachers .My name is Xu .You can also call me Victoria.I’m a 14-year-old student at Shuren School .I look common ,but I think what’s inside my heart is uncommon .I can go well with all my classm
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帮我修改一篇英语自我介绍Good afternoon ,teachers .My name is Xu .You can also call me Victoria.I’m a 14-year-old student at Shuren School .I look common ,but I think what’s inside my heart is uncommon .I can go well with all my classm
帮我修改一篇英语自我介绍
Good afternoon ,teachers .My name is Xu .You can also call me Victoria.I’m a 14-year-old student at Shuren School .
I look common ,but I think what’s inside my heart is uncommon .I can go well with all my classmates .My hobby is drawing traditional Chinese pianting So that I become a gentle and quiet girl .I enjoy English.because to express my idea in English is interesting.
That’s all .Thank you for giving me the chance .
帮我看下有没有语法错误,词类使用错误,合理性的错误.明天我要用,
帮我修改一篇英语自我介绍Good afternoon ,teachers .My name is Xu .You can also call me Victoria.I’m a 14-year-old student at Shuren School .I look common ,but I think what’s inside my heart is uncommon .I can go well with all my classm
我觉得整体上无明显语法错误,在表达上可能稍有不适的地方.what is inside my heart 中heart一般是内心的意思,而你后方向陈述的是你的性格、内涵与思想,我想这里用what is inside me更广义些.
I can go well with all my classmates最好用I can get on well with all my classmates.
My hobby is.quiet girl这个地方逻辑不太清晰.hobby就是爱好,爱好是生性喜爱的,不是为了去达到什么.所以so that这个目的性很强的短语不合适.我个人认为你这样说会更合适:My hobby is drawing traditional Chinese paintings which makes me a quiet and gentle girl.后面,你要谈论去用英语表达很有趣,用doing 句型更好.I enjoy English because expressing my idea in English is interesting.
最后,Thank you for giving me the chance有些含糊.the chance后应再加以修饰.如:Thank you for giving me the chance to show myself to all of you/ Thank you for giving me the chance to introduce myself to all of you.
Good afternoon , teachers .My name is Xu .You can also call me Victoria. I’m a 14-year-old student at Shuren School .
I look common ,but I think what inside my heart is uncommon .I can go well wi...
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Good afternoon , teachers .My name is Xu .You can also call me Victoria. I’m a 14-year-old student at Shuren School .
I look common ,but I think what inside my heart is uncommon .I can go well with all my classmates .My hobby is drawing traditional Chinese painting So I become a gentle and quiet girl . I enjoy English. because to express my idea in English is interesting.
That’s all . Thank you for giving me this chance
but I think what’s inside my heart is uncommon 那个's不去掉就2个动词了
So that I become a gentle and quiet girl...so that 是个词组,意思是以便于,所以that要去掉
应该就是这样了
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I’m a 14-year-old student at Shuren School .
at可以改成from
其他都还不错,楼主文采不赖啊~