这段话有错吗What's wrong with two people who love each other,regardless of their same sex,getting married?Why can't we accept the homosexuality?What's more,Some people are more disgusting than who don't accept homosexuals.They say that the slav
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这段话有错吗What's wrong with two people who love each other,regardless of their same sex,getting married?Why can't we accept the homosexuality?What's more,Some people are more disgusting than who don't accept homosexuals.They say that the slav
这段话有错吗
What's wrong with two people who love each other,regardless of their same sex,getting married?Why can't we accept the homosexuality?
What's more,Some people are more disgusting than who don't accept homosexuals.They say that the slaves have been freed and women have been liberated,so gay should achieve their right.They pretend to care about homosexuality for nothing but their curiosity.
Some people hold a flag which says"maintaining gay's rights" ,This behavior showed that the homosexuality is a special group.However,do you have seen the left-handed maintain their right?
I've seen a boy committed suicide because of parents' abuse.However,after his death,his parents were filled with regret.so,why can't we understand them a lot?
It's hopeful that most people have accepted homosexuals now,besides,there are some gay bar which can give homosexuals happiness.If you want to find a place where you can relax yourself,you can go to it.
这段话有错吗What's wrong with two people who love each other,regardless of their same sex,getting married?Why can't we accept the homosexuality?What's more,Some people are more disgusting than who don't accept homosexuals.They say that the slav
倒数第三段 第二句话时态不一致 SHOWED 是过去时 后面用的却是IS 建议SHOWED 改成SHOWS
倒数第一段 名词单复数 There are some gay bar 应该是There are some gay bars
最后一句建议改为you can go there
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