帮忙看一下这段英文语法是否正确xxx Ltd.is a leading provider of IT solutions and services,ranging from system integration and IT consulting,to software solutions and software platforms,and outsourced operations,to the banking industry i

帮忙看一下这段英文语法是否正确xxx Ltd.is a leading provider of IT solutions and services,ranging from system integration and IT consulting,to software solutions and software platforms,and outsourced operations,to the banking industry i
帮忙看一下这段英文语法是否正确
xxx Ltd.is a leading provider of IT solutions and services,ranging from system integration and IT consulting,to software solutions and software platforms,and outsourced operations,to the banking industry in China .
主要是把这一下这两句缩减到250字符以下：
xxx Ltd.is a leading provider of IT solutions and services to the banking industry in China .The Company focuses on offering a comprehensive suite of IT solutions and services to Chinese banks,ranging from system integration and IT consulting,to software solutions and software platforms,and outsourced operations.
和下面这一段比较哪个比较好啊?
xxxLtd.is a leading provider of IT solutions and services,covering system integration ,IT consulting,software solutions ,software platforms,outsourced operations,to the banking industry in China .
主要是语法是否正确，兄弟姐妹们？

帮忙看一下这段英文语法是否正确xxx Ltd.is a leading provider of IT solutions and services,ranging from system integration and IT consulting,to software solutions and software platforms,and outsourced operations,to the banking industry i
xxxLtd.is a leading provider of IT solutions and services,covering system integration ,IT consulting,software solutions ,software platforms,outsourced operations,to the banking industry in China .这句比较合适!加油!

xxx Ltd. is a leading provider of IT solutions and services,ranging from system integration and IT consulting, to software solutions and software platforms, and outsourced operations, to the banking industry in China
I find this to be the better one..although it can be further improved
这个不错！。。
语法对

最后一个吧 我觉得很简明
第一个特别是那几个to的短句太多了，虽然注意了语法，但是总有点dazzled

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xxx Ltd. is a leading provider of IT solutions and services,ranging from system integration and IT consulting to software solutions and software platforms, and from outsourced operations to the banking industry in China.
这样是不是好点?
这个没错,而且感觉不那么罗嗦.呵呵
xxxLtd. is a leading provider of IT solutions and services, covering system integration , IT consulting, software solutions ,software platforms, outsourced operations, to the banking industry in China .

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第2个比较好