雅思task2 看看有没有语法错误或是那里写的不好的 估计一下能得几分 In modern societies,it is increasing popular that lots of foundations or organizations encourage people to join their activities,this behavior aroused people

雅思task2 看看有没有语法错误或是那里写的不好的 估计一下能得几分 In modern societies,it is increasing popular that lots of foundations or organizations encourage people to join their activities,this behavior aroused people
雅思task2 看看有没有语法错误或是那里写的不好的 估计一下能得几分
In modern societies,it is increasing popular that lots of foundations or organizations encourage people to join their activities,this behavior aroused people’s attention.However,no maters what the campaigns does some person still feel uncertain.
There are several reasons established the organizations take these captivities .for one thing,everyone want have a health lifestyle for the body and soul but do not know how.Those charities through campaigns to publicize the knowledge about health that can make people have a health lifestyle.Meanwhile through propaganda activities can provide some post to some people who have no source of income.Moreover,as far as the environment conservation of publicize foundations activities are play an increasing important role in the society world car free day is a typical instance.
At the same time,those activities have exert positive effects on our society .Through publicize how important have a health lifestyle that can remind people life is not only focus on work also need to have a health body .As well as,those activities provide jobs for people can improve government revenue .The most obviously effect to foundations campaign is that via publicize environment conservation,more than 1000 cities around the world take part in the world car free day.
All at all,,those activities give the positive impression for the people of the world .they can provide so many things in all aspects of human life .to some extent ,those campaign impel the rapid development of economy

雅思task2 看看有没有语法错误或是那里写的不好的 估计一下能得几分 In modern societies,it is increasing popular that lots of foundations or organizations encourage people to join their activities,this behavior aroused people
以下几点供你参考：
1.this behavior---which
2.no maters what the campaigns does some person still feel uncertain--- no matter what the campaings do,some people still feel uncertain
3.everyone want---everyone wants
4.do not know---does not know
5.can provide some post --- they can provide job opportunies
6.Through publicize how important have a health lifestyle that --- By publicizing the knowledge of having a healthy lifestyle,it
7.life is not only focus on work also need to have a health body --- we can not only focus on work but also need to have a healthy body.
8.As well as--- What's more
9.provide jobs for people can improve --- provide jobs for people,which can
10.via publicize --- via publicizing
11.All at all --- All in all
12.those campaign--- those campaigns

满分多少？有很多语法小错误，整体还行楼主

首段
第一行 increasing 改为~ly (副词修饰形容词)
第二行 join 改为 join in (join +组织；join in + 活动) matters 改为单数形式

我先睡觉了，别人再帮看看。就别给我分了。