剑桥7 Test1 Task One 评分如果时间紧,任务急,该得到位,再追加分30The table shows the proprotion of money spent on a series of items by consumers in countries like Ireland,Italy,Spain,Sweden and Turkey in the year 2002.From the table,

剑桥7 Test1 Task One 评分如果时间紧,任务急,该得到位,再追加分30The table shows the proprotion of money spent on a series of items by consumers in countries like Ireland,Italy,Spain,Sweden and Turkey in the year 2002.From the table,
剑桥7 Test1 Task One 评分
如果时间紧,任务急,该得到位,再追加分30
The table shows the proprotion of money spent on a series of items by consumers in countries like Ireland,Italy,Spain,Sweden and Turkey in the year 2002.
From the table,it is not difficult to find that consumers in these countries tended to spend much less amount of money on clothing/footwear and leisure/education than on Food/Drinks/Tobacco.
In particular,Turkey is the country with teh most money spending on Food/Drinks/Tobacco(about 32.14%).Ireland has a similar figure (approximately 28.91),whereas the figure for the rest of three nations were much less,approximately 17% in average for that catagory.
For the money spent on Clothing and Footwear,there is not very large differentiations among these countries.Among which,Italy appears to be the country with the highest portion (9%),in contraction to Sweden,which has the least expenditure on that catagory(5.4%).
The trend of small variability continues in the catagory of leisure and education.Although Turkey again becomes the country with the highest expenditure,the number is not huge(4.35%),comparing to the first catagory.However,Spain becomes the country that people mostly unwilling to consume leisure or educational items.
Overall,the table illustrates the information about consuming condition by items in five particular contries.

剑桥7 Test1 Task One 评分如果时间紧,任务急,该得到位,再追加分30The table shows the proprotion of money spent on a series of items by consumers in countries like Ireland,Italy,Spain,Sweden and Turkey in the year 2002.From the table,
From the table, it is not difficult to find that consumers in these countries tended to spend much less amount of money on clothing/footwear and leisure/education than on Food/Drinks/Tobacco.
---->From the table, it is not difficult to find that consumers in these countries tended to spend much less money on clothing/footwear and leisure/education than on Food/Drinks/Tobacco.
In particular, Turkey is the country with teh most money spending on Food/Drinks/Tobacco(about 32.14%).
---->In particular, people in Turkey like to spend most on Food/Drinks/Tobacco(about 32.14%).
主语是人spend,不是country spend
in average for that catagory.
----> in average in that catagory.
For the money spent
---->For the spending...
there is not very large differentiations
---->there is not huge differentiation
基本不错.10分可以打6-7分.
不过,你能做到,只看你的文章,把图标大部分内容画出来吗?如果你画不出来,你就要想想,还差什么没有描述出来.
另外拼写错误,你在word里面自己改吧.不帮你找虫子了.

先说几个词汇错误的问题
百分比不是portion也不是proprotion（第一行），而是proportion.
catagory拼写错误，应该是category。
第四段有个明显的语法错误：应该说 there are not very large differentiations among these countries.
评分：
1． 文章结构完整，论...

全部展开

先说几个词汇错误的问题
百分比不是portion也不是proprotion（第一行），而是proportion.
catagory拼写错误，应该是category。
第四段有个明显的语法错误：应该说 there are not very large differentiations among these countries.
评分：
1． 文章结构完整，论点论据充分。Good!
2． 基本没有语法错误，同时正确地混合运用简单句和复杂句。
3． 时态方面做得不错，没有错误，特别注意到了第三人称单数的问题。
4． 用词比较准确，但是还需要注意词组搭配以及一些词的用法。
估计分数：6.5－7分

收起

该表显示了对一个在爱尔兰，意大利，西班牙，瑞典和土耳其等国的项目，消费者在2002年的一系列花钱proprotion。
从表中，我们不难发现，在这些国家的消费者往往花服装少得多的钱数/鞋和休闲/教育比食品/饮料/烟草。
特别是，土耳其是与食物最赚钱的支出/饮料/烟草（约32.14％）的国家。爱尔兰也有类似的数字（约28.91），而对其余的第三个国家的数字少得多，平均为这一类约占17...

全部展开

该表显示了对一个在爱尔兰，意大利，西班牙，瑞典和土耳其等国的项目，消费者在2002年的一系列花钱proprotion。
从表中，我们不难发现，在这些国家的消费者往往花服装少得多的钱数/鞋和休闲/教育比食品/饮料/烟草。
特别是，土耳其是与食物最赚钱的支出/饮料/烟草（约32.14％）的国家。爱尔兰也有类似的数字（约28.91），而对其余的第三个国家的数字少得多，平均为这一类约占17％。
有关服装和鞋类所花的钱，没有这些国家之间非常大的分化。其中，意大利似乎是国家最高的部分（9％）收缩，瑞典，这对这一类（5.4％至少支出）。
总的来说，表说明有关消费的五个特别contries项目状态信息
看不明白，的地方可能有问题

收起