请帮我修改英文作文,最好帮我重新写结尾My educational goalOnce,teacher asked us what our educational goals are.Someone said to become rich,someone said to find a good job.By myself,I have many educational goals.First of all,I want to

请帮我修改英文作文,最好帮我重新写结尾My educational goalOnce,teacher asked us what our educational goals are.Someone said to become rich,someone said to find a good job.By myself,I have many educational goals.First of all,I want to
请帮我修改英文作文,最好帮我重新写结尾
My educational goal
Once,teacher asked us what our educational goals are.Someone said to become rich,someone said to find a good job.By myself,I have many educational goals.
First of all,I want to get my high school diploma.To get to this goal,I must finish the credits and pass the Cahsee.Plus,I didn’t finished my high school in China,so for myself now,the most important thing is getting the high school diploma.
Second,attending college is another valuable target for me,I like the education of US,because it’s different from my home country.I like its freedom.But,I also need to work hard to achieve the goal,because I want to transfer to UCLA,when I was in China,it is my dream.Also,I want to study English as my major and get an English degree.
Third,I hope I can be a reporte,As a reporter,in order to find the news,I will travel to different cities everyday.For example,if a terrible accident happened,I will arrive the site quickly and report the news to the people as soon as possible,I would like to be a reporter,because as a reporter,I can help many poor people,for example,some people need help from society,I can write a report and tell the citizen that these people need their assistance.
These are my educational goal,I will try my best to come true them.

请帮我修改英文作文,最好帮我重新写结尾My educational goalOnce,teacher asked us what our educational goals are.Someone said to become rich,someone said to find a good job.By myself,I have many educational goals.First of all,I want to
总的来说没有太多错误 只是句子都比简单 个别词语用得不准确
改动1：Someone said to become rich, someone said to find a good job.-----Someone want to become rich, someone want to find a good job.
改动2：To get to this goal-----To reach this goal
结尾：The above mentioned are my educational goals.Whenever I think of the goals,I cannot but feel energetic.As a high school student,the only thing I can do to reach those goals it to study hard.I will try my best to realise them

把第三段的finished换成finish
把第四段的second换成secondly ,country换成country’s

My educational goal
Once,my teacher asked us what our educational goals are. Someone said to become rich,while someone said to find a good job. By to me, I have many educational goals.
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My educational goal
Once,my teacher asked us what our educational goals are. Someone said to become rich,while someone said to find a good job. By to me, I have many educational goals.
First of all, I want to get a high school degree. I must finish the credits and pass the Cahsee to reach this goal. But I haven't finished my high school in China, so to myself now, the most important thing is to get the high school diploma.
Second, attending college is another valuable target for me, I like the education of US, because it’s different from my home country. I like its freedom. But, I also need to work hard to achieve this goal, because I want to transfer to UCLA, when I am in China, it is my dream. Also, I want to study English as my major and get an English degree.
Third, I hope I can be a reporter,who will travel to different cities everyday in order to find the news. For example, if a terrible accident happenes, I will arrive the site quickly and report the news to people as soon as possible, I would like to be a reporter, because I can help many poor people, for example, some people need help from society, I can write a report and tell the citizen that these people need their assistance.
These are my educational goals, I will try my best to let my dreams come ture.And I hope I can devote myself to societ and become a useful man.

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