请大伙帮帮忙改进或修改下列英语文章 这是即将参加一个英语比赛的自我介绍 要比赛了Nice to meet you all.I am a twelve years old sunny girl.My disposition is extroversion,the interpersonal relationship is very good!I l

请大伙帮帮忙改进或修改下列英语文章 这是即将参加一个英语比赛的自我介绍 要比赛了Nice to meet you all.I am a twelve years old sunny girl.My disposition is extroversion,the interpersonal relationship is very good!I l
请大伙帮帮忙改进或修改下列英语文章 这是即将参加一个英语比赛的自我介绍 要比赛了
Nice to meet you all.
I am a twelve years old sunny girl.
My disposition is extroversion,the interpersonal relationship is very good!
I like green,because it means hope.
And I like listening to music.Music is sweetness.
Today,I am very happy and exciting to be here,to participate ‘star of outlook’English Talent Competition.And I belive that I will try all my best to demonstrate!
I hope i can pass the exam.Thank you very much.That's all.
很高兴见到你.
我是一个十二岁的阳光女孩.
我的性格外向,人际关系非常好!
我喜欢绿色,因为它的意思是希望.
我喜欢听音乐.音乐是甜蜜.
今天,我感到非常高兴和激动人心的是在这里,参加'希望之星'英语风采大赛.我相信我将尽我最大的努力来证明一切!
我希望我能通过考试.非常感谢你.这就是全部.
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请大伙帮帮忙改进或修改下列英语文章 这是即将参加一个英语比赛的自我介绍 要比赛了Nice to meet you all.I am a twelve years old sunny girl.My disposition is extroversion,the interpersonal relationship is very good!I l
Nice to meet you all.
I am a twelve years old and as you can see, I'm a sunny and exoscopic girl.[exoscopic 外向的]
[My disposition is extroversion, the interpersonal relationship is very good!]这句话很不地道,不建议说.
I have a lot of friends and I get along with them well. [get along (with) 相处融洽；词组,地道.]
My favorite color is green, for its meaning is hope. [变换一下句式,不要老是I like .]
Also I like listening to music. Music can always nourish people's heart.[音乐可以滋养人们的心灵]
Today, I am very glad[比happy好] and exciting to be here, to participate in[缺少了介词,语法错误] the [缺少了the]‘star of outlook’English Talent Competition.
[And I belive that I will try all my best to demonstrate!]中式英语,建议使用如下句子.
And I believe that I can behave well and show you the best of myself.[我相信我能表现出最好的自己]
[I hope i can pass the exam.]不建议说,很别扭.
可以说 I hope you like me and give me a chance.
Thank you very much.That's all. Hope to meet you again.[希望再次见到你们.]
总的来看：
Nice to meet you all.
I am a twelve years old and as you can see, I'm a sunny and exoscopic girl.
I have a lot of friends and I get along with them well.
My favorite color is green, for its meaning is hope.
Also I like listening to music. Music can always nourish people's heart.
Today, I am very glad and exciting to be here, to participate in the ‘star of outlook’English Talent Competition.
And I believe that I can behave well and show you the best of myself.
I hope you like me and give me a chance.
Thank you very much.That's all. Hope to meet you again.
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